love duke

love duke

A Poem by sarik
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It happen random.. she was beautiful, no no she always is actually..  ‎ I just pen down.. her beauty or may be love.. ‎

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love duke 
Seems happy, seems happy
 when I look at her
 Did she notice my presence,yeah my presence
 When I look at her
 Oo oo 
 Yeah, yeah she is pretty, pretty enough
 Did she look at me
 She Snatched my words, when I look at her
 Isn't,  isn't she pretty, so  do I look at her.
  Seems happy, do she seems happy
 Do she looks at me or, do I look at her 
 Stanza 2
 Eyes brown, when I look at her
  My silence end, yes she is pretty, pretty enough
 So, shall I speak or shall I wait
 Damn, she is pretty, pretty enough
 Stanza 3
 Words end, my silence creep 
 But wanna speak, wanna speak 
 Damn, she is pretty, pretty enough
 So shall I speak or shall she.
 Stanza 4 
 Noticed at, smiled pretty and I looked at her
 So shall I speak or  shall she
 God will u suggest this,
 will u speak,
 or tell something
 Continue

© 2016 sarik


Author's Note

sarik
May be you found it difficult to read or may be not. This is love actually, what i imagine looking at her,and tried to expressed it in words, the only thing I know.
and finally thanks for the view..

critics accepted..

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Very nice flow of thoughts. What was the ending to be? Easy to read. The words danced properly for the reader.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


sarik

4 Years Ago

Oow thanq Coyote..
End is nice actually :)
Beautifully expressed,Thank you for sharing :)!

Posted 5 Years Ago


sarik

5 Years Ago

Okay, thanku for writing zaisham. This is special..
Critique: (Eyes blown, when I look at her) Eyes brown?
(Damn, she is pretty pretty enough) pretty, pretty enough

Review: The largest section in life's book is the one on relationships, you have added a new page to that section. A life lesson in love and romance, an inspiration to all who read this and learn from it, well done :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

Posted 5 Years Ago


sarik

5 Years Ago

Bear, this is very much appreciated madam, I have done the changes as suggested..

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Added on August 31, 2016
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sarik

delhi, north India, India



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