Shattered

Just a brokenhearted poem :P

Shattered

 

 

I am glass.

A mirror.

Some would say I was beautiful, even stop to admire.

Till I met you.

You thought I looked beautiful raining down in crystal raindrops.

I thought your hands would be there to catch me, but they only sent me to the ground.

Like a mirror I only saw your outward reflection.

Never did I look past your lying eyes or smile.

But now it’s too late.

I am glass.

Shattered.

Author's Note

Okay just to get this straight....This is NOT about me. (how you can tell, i used the word beautiful) :P

This was just one poem that came to mind when emotion fills the heart.

Reviews

[Summer D.]

Simple language. Such simple language.
This was good. You should write more poetry.
Poetry Enhances Story Telling.
It breaks barriers and gives way to floods of descriptive language.

A few lines I think you could rephrase however because of untimely repetition.
"raindrops" and "raining."
"Never did I look past your lying eyes or smile."

Good one though.
A mirror wise :)

[Lydia]

I really like this. A very beautiful poem.

[Brittany]

Your soul is beautiful. Great imagery with the mirror and broken glass. Enjoyed.

[Jasmine Thousand]

THIS IS AMAZING. +1 to my favorites! I love the scheme of this song, simply fantastic. AMAZING (yet again :P)

The picture is pretty too. :3

*~Anastasia Shalroy~*

[Whiskurz]

This was quite profound......Great write.....Whisk

[The XYZ Writer]

You know what I've noticed?? I always read you guys' work, but -_- forget to review them. So here is mine:

It didn't rhyme but, it's really beautiful. The idea it has and the way you put it together is really interesting. For me, the rhyming just makes poems more like a song. The free verse ones seem more realistic. So, there is another reason why I love this. :)

AND. YOU. ARE. BEAUTIFUL. Got that? Or do I need to bring out the wooden pole again?

Good job my friend, great work. *applause*

[Tai Ryens]

Beautiful metaphor stated in this poem, and it flowed perfectly. This is really a brilliant poem, believe me. Left me speechless.

[AK]

Summer, you ARE beautiful. I completely agree with Ashley, Amanda and Ami(weird right all their names start with A and so does mine). This poem is amazing, I couldn't tell you how brilliant it is. The emotions in it are stunning-I totally love how you use words in a poem. Sure, it doesn't rhyme or have a fixed metre but who says that means a poem is bad?

[Victoria Elizabeth]

I loved it great job!!!!!!!!!!!! Its awesome!!!!!!

[Ami N.]

Okay Summer. Let me take a moment and drill this into your head.
You. Are. Beautiful!

Okay. Your turn. Repeat after me: I - am - beautiful :D
And don't let anyone make you think otherwise.

Moving on to your poem, it was AMAZING. The great part about this was that it didn't follow a certain rhyme/rhythm. It's what makes it seem more realistic :)

Well written Breezy, and don't forget what I told ya :P