In your eyes

Love poem

Once I saw your bright eyes beyond the stars.

I kept looking straight into your despond eyes.

That wept from heaven to heaven,

Now on earth lost forever.

How many ages will you weep,

To the one who’s lost on earth and then heaven?

While you begged angles to trace your love.

They kept looking in your eyes forever.

To the lost paradise ----- Now they just discover.

God cried out to angles, where is the lover?

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[Glen Yumang Manese]

Once I saw your bright eyes beyond the stars.

I kept looking straight into your despond eyes.

That wept from heaven to heaven,

Now on earth lost forever.

How many ages will you weep,

To the one who’s lost on earth and then heaven?

While you begged angles to trace your love.

They kept looking in your eyes forever.

To the lost paradise ----- Now they just discover.

God cried out to angles, where is the lover?
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Once I saw your bright eyes beyond the stars.

I kept looking straight into your despond eyes.

That wept from heaven to heaven,

Now on earth lost forever.

How many ages will you weep,

To the one who’s lost on earth and then heaven?

While you begged angels to trace your love.

They kept looking in your eyes forever.

To the lost paradise ----- Now they just discover.

God cried out to angels, where is the lover?

JUST A COUPLE AREAS IN MISSPELLING...AND NOW ONTO YOUR VERSE:

SEEMS AN ENDEARING WRITE TO SOMEONE YOU'RE TRYING TO WOE...IN YOUR FAVOR...THE LINES TALK ABOUT HEAVEN ON EARTH EXPERIENCE...YET THE LOVER IS NOT FOUND...AS GOD QUESTIONS TO KNOW YET HE ALREADY KNOW THE ANSWER DEEP INSIDE...HIS ALL SEEING EYE...

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

Thank you my dear so much and God bless you.How sweet you of you that you correct me?

[Glen Yumang Manese]

YOU'RE WELCOME...JUST HELPING...ADDING CLARITY TO YOUR WORK...THAT'S WHAT WE ARE SUPPOSE TO DO ON A WRITING SITE TO IMPROVE THE QUALITY OF THE VERSE AND ENJOY THE LINES FOR WHICH WE WANT TO CONVEY WITH OTHERS...