Little Miss Heartbreaker

For my actions, I became unaware,

my word, for leading you into a chimera,

I deeply regret.

A wishful thinking, fool’s paradise,

that’s all it will ever be

to you, and to him, to her and to this.

In a contrite tone, I say

I hope one day they realize

the façade I was pulling.

That the mean looking girl,

who ran around breaking hearts

was just as broken as they are.

Reviews

[Mariel Razon]

One thing I like about poems is that they tell a story from the writer's point of view which makes it more unique. The title may be cliche but the message you conveyed here gives a new definition of being heartbreaker to being heartbroken and I think a lot of people will relate to this. I like your writing style by the way :)

[Scarlet M.]

Thank you for the wonderful review! I'm glad I was able to convey to the readers what being a heart breaker is in my own personal view.

By the way, you're from the Philippines right? I am too. :)

[Mariel Razon]

yay!! I thought you're from Japan cause your location says so, but anyway, that's great!! It is really nice meeting Filipino people here on internet :)

[barleygirl]

Altho "Little Miss Heartbreaker" is a common story, you've made it sound fresh & original by your unusual point of view in this poem. I like that you've used some unusual word choices, such as "chimera" (which I had to look up) & "contrite" . . . very good job of pinpointing the perfect words. The last stanza, of course, is also very enlightening, as most people never get that far, when describing "Miss Heartbreaker" . . . this is the crux of the message: hurt people do hurtful things.

[Scarlet M.]

Thank you for giving such an honest and wonderful review. Truthfully I was having a hard time deciding on the title, I find it a bit cliche as well but I couldn't come up with a better one so I decided to use this. I'm glad the poem itself turned out good. I think I was able to convey to the readers what I felt while writing this piece.

[V]

Story of many lives, I'd say. Nicely written piece, heartfelt, deep and well-structured.

[Scarlet M.]

Thank you for the wonderful review. I'm glad you liked it.

[V]

You're welcome. :)