Disperse

A reply to "Revive".

It was my mere presence that left you - just my presence, never my song. Perhaps you were lost, searching for a hand to lead you out of the labyrinth you put yourself in. I could have been the one, but I could not. How can I? I was in that labyrinth as well, and you would only go halfway to nowhere if I held your hand, in the awkwardness of everything. It was the time when all there was left for me to see was a mist of perplexity.

 

There were things that I could not escape from. My fate was clear. One day I’d leave; my presence would only taint the ground you stand on; one day the world will see that this was not where I should belong.

 

I know, as I can feel through the regale of your music and your words, I am loved. But I had to leave. The nightfall had come at last, it became the twilight of this awkwardness. I left you my song, I left you my light. Nonetheless, your sight has dimmed. When the drums of solitude began to cadence with the fading of the music you played, everything ended.

 

But you should not cease to listen to the beat, for when daybreak comes, your music shall be heard again, the drums of hope remain.

 

I, too, now understand what I once cannot. You’ve loved my presence from the very start of the maze. Just my presence. You did not hear my song.

 

You will understand, my “disperse” is your “revive”. And when you find it within you, you know you are loved.

 

 

© Maxinne Marie

March 17, 2008. 12:00 AM.

Author's Note

I wrote this prose poem as if responding to RC Vagilidad's "Revive" - http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/pircano/185970/

Reviews

[Dante Balsote]

Your writing style fits best in block style poetry (my opinion). When you write in this style, your poetry always shows a misty atmosphere but the truths that it speaks always give it clarity.

"Just my presence, never my song." Lovely.

-ps-
Gotta see RC's "Revive". :D

[Chaos X 3]

Lovely and good structure.
I will have to read the "revive" poem. :)

[Aya Fayyad]

beautiful structuring, love the style of the piece.

[Dshaman14]

woah idol gd tana si nang maxine ah hahahaha :D the best... have to read "REvive:

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Lovely write. Loved this!

[chaireinferrascalayca]

you left me speechless... i've read this before and rc's as well... you always write good articles.

[Dante Balsote]

Reading this again after 8 months, "I, too, understand what I once cannot." It seems literature would not have the beauty it has without any metaphysical utterance even if it would mean that the plot is set in private language. So long as it considers the universality of experience, the resulting piece is always a great write insofar as the insulation created by a private language is nullified.

I believe there is always beauty in the utterance of a truth even as the beautiful could not always be truthful. And where there are truthful words, such as succinctly stated in, "And when you find it within you, you know you are loved," the result is always a beautiful tapestry of words.

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

ei... i thought it was a horror grudged-hair effect... as the picture enlarges, i see the details..beautiful picture, so this is the one you're referring... nice shot (shutter manipulation)... and great supplementation of the beach ground and horizon... cool tinged of brown hues.. yeah, i agree its a good deliberation with the poem and pic..

this is the saddest story (reply) ever.. *sniff *sniff... (tears rolling on outer canthus...) (^^,)