Our Swan Song

On that fateful day

you promised you'd stay.

Our love filled the air,

we had nothing to fear.

I thought we had it all,

I thought our love would never fall.

I thought we were strong,

I guess I was wrong.

So this is our swan song.

Reviews

[Chaz Hemsworth]

The meter here really enforce l enhances the piece. It sounds song like. I could picture this being a chorus in something. The imagery also is done sparingly but with such skill.

[a schizophrenic writer]

as a chorus? you really think so? Im flattered haha ive never tried writing songs before

[cycy]

great rhymes on this one, i love the way the words just flow into each other, well written.

[a schizophrenic writer]

thanks again! Im really glad you like my stuff (:

[cycy]

if its worth reading, i like, i hardly ever take to a lot of work by the same author so yahh...you goood :)

[a schizophrenic writer]

Im flattered! haha thanks(:

[cycy]

and I'm still waiting for that next chapter....

[a schizophrenic writer]

haha ill go work on it right now!