Critique

  To take in slowly a fine work of art

A poem, a glass of wine

Penmanship on the page

To feast on the flaws with unclothed eyes

Cause their demise

Make better that which need not be improved

To embrace the mistakes and make them your own

While seeking that which cannot be achieved 

Perfection can only be perceived 

Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

I can relate to this Realm. I like the tone of the writing here. It came to me as an invitation to embrace and to understand where the individual is and taken that into consideration seeing if there is something there that may or may not help the person not only in writing terms. I can tell you that critiques are customary. In fact in most sites were you have to pay for writing you would have to write a few critiques before allowed to post. So I value those people that would point flaws in a respectfull manner. I value those who maybe hold the formality of writings and want to critique experimental works because they escape the boundaries. Ultimately, I value all who are able out of interest and respect for writing contribute in whichever way the deem best. Bathing anyone of hopeless adulation is equally disrespectful and pointless to the writer. Insulting and showing disrespect not even optional and those people should not even join a writing site.

I like the tone of what you express here.

Thank you.

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much for your insightful words. That is pretty much exactly what I was going for in this one. I'm happy that you like this one!

[Bright Ocean Star]

RW, it is important to own your mistakes, make the corrections as you see fit, but be open to other's suggestions. No one is perfect, and other writers may have ideas that we didn't think of before. Great piece of writing here, thank you for sharing this one...:)

[realmwriter]

Thank you very much. you are indeed correct. I am very happy that you like it!

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We write from what we know and what we have inside. Poetry, fine art, wine, and the artistic styles we employ to create such works come from our own perceptions of how our environment connects and interacts with the self. Therefore, unless we can view such works through the cultural lenses through which they were created, our own criticisms serve only to hinder the creative process. I enjoyed this write.

[realmwriter]

Yeah I really try not to critique my own work too much, especially while I'm writing it. I do of course, edit my work, but I rarely ever actually change the body of it. If I do that, then I may as well not write. Thank you very much, I'm glad that you enjoyed this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

poetry is real...if we look at it through poetic eyes, rather than those black and white eyes of criticism...

easy for others to tell us what we should have written....but the poems come from our hearts and souls...we pour them on to the page...with the ink of our blood.

and I agree...some try to "make better that which need not be improved"---

jacob

[realmwriter]

Well thank you very much jacob. I am happy that you like this one. Sometimes short and sweet works best. I do seek critique sometimes though. Say there is something about a piece that I wrote and can't put my finger on it. It does have it's place. But there is no reason to be rude about it either. I couldn't agree with you more though. Thank you again.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, there are kind and gentle critiques, and they work better than harsh and discouraging ones.