I called to him

I woke up this morning

4 am

can't sleep

can't close my eyes

Movement is impossible

 

He came this morning

He said he would

He stood there

Eyes pitch black

Light faded and hidden

 

 

the only way i know of him

Screams of damnation

Hollar from within

Caped hood velvet hands

Stretch out for me

 

An eternal life of exile to the core of hell

Torn pieces of heart leave the trail i once lived

The bloody blade that made him come

Dripping off the corner of death

 

That call on the other end of static

Nothingness of fire and death

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[r]

.... :O

I am amazed!! ZOMG!!! This is so dark and I got chills from reading it! It's so vivid and ...*shiver* frightening. Very well done. I love this part:

"An eternal life of exile to the core of hell
Torn pieces of heart leave the trail i once lived
The bloody blade that made him come
Dripping off the corner of death"

It's just so amazing, the way you describe the trail of torn heart pieces. It's just....awesome. (: I love it.

[Kathy]

This is b-e-a-utiful! The concept is a little sad, but there's nothing wrong with that. Sometimes, sad is beautiful. And, this is beautifully sad. Congrats! Bravo! This is definitely going into my library on here. ^.^

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why is death always depicted as an evil character? When death is just a transitional period...you did though capture the essense of the reaper..well done

[Dizzy]

It's sad-making, but well written.

[Tate Morgan]

Depresion will condemn us every time throw it off you wont be condemn ed

[Geralyn Miller]

Despair comes to call in the lives of many who never have the wit or courage to speak of him. You have bravely and beautifully written of his visit.

[MuSe Ampoule]

Hmmm...is he Mr. Reaper....Mr. Grim Reaper? BME, this is a good personification of such a dark persona...and one that is rarely talked about as a lover(?) and outside of the Ghost of Christmas past ideal. I like this take...is interesting.

[♥SunkissAngel♥]

Outstanding. This poem sent chills down my spine. You did a good job in the poem.

~SK

[sarah]

amazing! only thing that can be said

[Wondering Mind]

dark is the word