Dragon's Breath

Those that speak with vile language

Thy speak is Dragon’s breath

Spew with serpent’s tongue

F that and thee and this

A wildfire’s becoming both old and young

 

Spreads rippling effects

S**t, damn, and piss lyrics of thine sung

And a Raven sits, whispers gently to me

On my shoulder hung

 

Each puff unbeknownst bleeds

Brings them closer to thy death

A piece of soul torn away; heart rips

“Drifts further with fire into wind” He says

 

Soon vultures do fly; circle in

A dark cloud crown; light abating

Victim passers-by smolder innocent singe

Blackbird evermore feather blackened wings off debating

 

Should one slay

Do the wretched Dragon in

Or leave be, to its own, demise in wordplay

As a sow… to thus wallow in its sin

Reviews

[Blue]

Words have a tremendous power. These times, people use that power to wound. Thank you for your wise words, Mike.

[Michael G. Smith]

No thank you Arzel very your insightful comment.

[Rita L. Sev]

While I try to avoid the concept that a word in itself is "bad", I do find the overuse of such language to be inelegant. People go for ease and shock value, rather than seeking words of real power to get their point across. I like your style here, Mike - a parody of a classic, while the modern message comes through loud and clear!

[Michael G. Smith]

Thanks Rita. Hearing these words hurts my soul especially when I am caught off guard in a movie or by a person speaking.

[gabrielle]

Every word that comes out of our mouth should be words to heal, words to inspire and not words to destroy. Thank you for sharing this piece.

[Michael G. Smith]

Yes, kind words can lift a person up from the deepest abyss. Thanks Gabrielle.

[Avinash]

I agree that these days if people meet accidental death and could speak last words ..they are more likely to speak...F**k or S**t... Instead of God and that pretty much summarizes their life down here.

[Michael G. Smith]

Yes, many tend to see the negative first placing themselves in their own demise. Thanks for your review.

[A. Amos]

Mike this one I can truly feel came right from your heart, honest, brutal, raw and that is purity of writing nothing to please people but to share what is in your mind. I truly enjoy this sharp and wit write.
Looking forward to read more of your work, as you write with freedom of mind and that is what reflect and make your poetry unique. Thank you for sharing

[Frieda P]

I like the poem, it's written really well, I don't think the 'F' word is a sin, you're a tough cookie Mike. Sometimes you just gotta let her rip. I'm the last person who should be critiquing this one....but fook it, I liked the read. ;-)

[Michael G. Smith]

When you do too much of something bad it numbs you to its effects. I know I used to be one to use the word in daily language. As my testimony of the savior grew one day I just felt it hurting me each time it came out of my mouth. It was a weird experience but that's the miracle of the gospel. We start to see with spiritual eyes the things that are eternal that the flesh cannot see or experience until we atune our spirit with him. Thank you for the review and respect you as a poet and friend here on this site.

[Frieda P]

Just love it when you get all preachy with me Mike, was my pleasure sir...

[Michael G. Smith]

Easy, easy...

[Michael G. Smith]

And it's teachy not preachy, lol.

[Frieda P]

We had this discussion once before if I recall...I accept your beliefs and I won't impose mine upon you...nuff said.

[Frieda P]

I had enough religious teaching for one lifetime, thank you very much, you're talking to an old Catholic girl from way back.

[Michael G. Smith]

I'm only sharing the joy that I have found. I won't think that would be offense. I also grew up Catholic. I found new spirit of truth in their understanding. I love ya Frieda. You are a pistol.

[Frieda P]

Ha you're just saying that so you don't have to go to confession on Friday.... ;-)

[Michael G. Smith]

Lol........

[Frieda P]

:-D