Another one

workout poem

I pump,

And lift the iron up

Pain in my arms like no other.

My muscles tear

My body wears

Sweat pours

I let out a roar

I shout as I lift

Pumping my fist

Another one!

My heartbeat runs

I burn like the sun!

Another one!

Author's Note

i say this while i am working out to force me to continue

Reviews

[Brittany]

This is great and I'm not exactly an exerciser. I love it though!

[Senseless whatever]

Good one. Anyone that really lifts can feel this.

[Ana_Cristina]

This is actually really simple but really good... I like the fact you repeat the word another one, showing how much you're forcing yourself to get to a non-existant (as it seems) target... The descriptions you use are very informative and show the main emotion and feeling which is pain... the way you've seperated it makes the poem have more of a beat meaning we go along with it even more, which kind of makes us feel what you're feeling whenever you do these work outs... well done... :) ♥ x.

[creativekat]

WELL! very inspiring! im going to try it! : )

[Nina Kari]

I agree with Ashley, its like a chant and i lke it. Like the persons chanting MORE MORE MORE! Like its vital, the very essence of their life. Very nice.

[r]

no problem, lol

[ShaneBerry]

cheezit, lol thnks for sayin that my sis said the same thing averia did lol, muscles tear and heal over night after excersize, that is why it burns

[r]

Awesome, motivational, i like the "i burn like the sun" line.

Oh, and to Averia down there, your muscles actually tear to grow. The cells tear so they can actually grow bigger. So, Shaneberry, you're actually right on that. :)

[Marlena]

Interesting, but I think if your muscles were tearing you'd need to go to a hospital xD Maybe change that line? Otherwise, nice work :)

[Onyx_Rayne]

Very nice...sets a pace of concentration... the imagery made my muscles burn!

Excellent write- keep 'em coming ;)