Proof.

Proof.

A Poem by shanemusic

She sleeps with an unloaded gun pressed to her forehead. 
It’s the only thing that calms him enough to close his eyes. 
She doesn’t want to admit that it’s psychotic and dangerous. 
He loves the way the cold circle kisses him to sleep. 
She loves the way it fits into her hand and doesn’t let go. 
He’s afraid that he’ll want more and load a bullet. 
She’s afraid that she’ll want more and pull the trigger. 
I suppose the only way to prove you’re alive is to die.

© 2012 shanemusic


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Depth in your words. These last below three lines has made an impact indeed.

He’s afraid that he’ll want more and load a bullet.

She’s afraid that she’ll want more and pull the trigger.

I suppose the only way to prove you’re alive is to die.........

beautiful, fullfill with the emotions indeed. lovely write i'd say.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Intense so real strong emotion hrre

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow very deep and intense, I loved it! 100
God bless
~Mickey

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is so good!

Are you all right?
I'm only asking because when I felt bad around half a year ago, I could write things very similar to this... I got help, but if you don't(If you feel bad) I'm afraid it isn't going to end well :-(

Posted 11 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this only because of that last line. The exact reason I will question reality more than what I already have. It's waiting to strike, and our masks won't hold strong enough for its blow.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I don't mean this negatively, it was written well, but are you okay?

Posted 12 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Haunting and very meaningful. The last line is especially good. Well written!

Posted 12 Years Ago


deep

Posted 12 Years Ago



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