Bright Colors (Are you Compensating For Something?)

I’ve placed neon band aids on my heart

Trying to keep myself from tearing it apart

Perhaps in pieces, it won’t hurt so bad.

Maybe without it, I won’t be sad.

 

Spiders thread dissolves, once in contact with tears,

And falling petals personify, my greatest fears.

My heart begins to decay, when it meets open air

But I no longer feel the wind, I’ve entered the dragons lair.

 

Band aids fall off, I forgot they’re not waterproof

I cannot feel the pain, the dentist rips out the wrong tooth.

I refuse to cry, although breaking down is easy

The thought of letting go makes my insides queasy.

 

Living hurts, but it’ll be okay

Existence is painful, but that’s just today.

Tomorrow will capture another’s dream

And that night I will capture hope in a moon beam.

 

I’ve placed neon band aids on my heart

Now that you’re here, it can’t fall apart

You hold me together, and even though healing hurts bad…

With you by my side, I’m no longer sad.

 

 

Reviews

[Andrea Vargas]

i love it, it borught me to tears, your words resemble a part of me (: great write! just fantastic and i miss you

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Brandon is right, it's a little messy in spots. But the flow of your poetry is nicely done in a few different places so ill applaud that, but I think the second stanza is probably the strong when it comes to imagery. Neon bandaids, hmm. What an interesting interpretation

[Brandon]

i love this but its kind of all over the place like i know where this poem is coming from since ive been there but it seems like youre trying to make it rhyme too hard and to me takees away from what youre really going for. i do like it a lot though but that was just one critism i thought of

[Raven Starhawk]

Brilliant. That word shines in my mind after reading this. I am not completely sure how to type the words I am experiencing at the moment. So as I read your words a second time I am again brought to the word brilliant.

[Chris]

A September morn - coffee in hand... it reads a bit rough, though it isn't about using two single words instead of one large one (i.e. moon beam). You present valid feelings - but, something just doesn't FEEL right as an aftertaste.

Least to me.
Take care,
Chris

[Ruth]

Gorgeous work love! This shows such devotion..battle with dark with the right person and we win :) xx

[Silent Knight]

beautiful