the dark black moon

Writers Note: i know this isn't as good and really short :-) enjoy!


shattered in pieces through all the disaster
how and when my mind starts to wonder
somebody to help me go through the rough times
but nobody has been by my side
here on my own waiting for a sign
questions running through my head
an answer i seek through the skies that have not yet been found
nothing to hold onto to protect me from fear
nothing i see other than the big dark black moon



-Shoug

Reviews

[DriDri]

I love this, nicely written !

[Shoug]

thank you!:D

[zainul]

Hope a lovely bright moon appears for you soon.

[Shoug]

thank you:)

[zainul]

You are most welcome,dear poet :)

[zainul]

I have added you in flickr

[Shoug]

alright, enjoy my photographs that i have added on there.

[zainul]

Thanks :)

[Dr. Wood ?]

it's not as bad as you might think....it reads very well and you get your message across with some skill....It shows that you did not stand over it for too long....Sometimes poems can be overworked...I think you could alter go to get on the 3rd line...and have to has on the 3rd from last..still pretty good though as far as this reader is concerned

[Shoug]

thanks! i just needed to write something and well, write my feelings out:)

[Dr. Wood ?]

you did a fine job

[Shoug]

thank you so much:)