Fire

A song for inspiration, for unity

Someday you will walk without a fear
Your hands in mine
Someday you will walk when the sky is clear
With a new world to design

You will reach the stars and touch the sky
You will let your heart reach out and fly ...
And there will be nothing left to make you cry
I won't let a tear ever fog your eye ...

When your darkest fears come alive
Your aspirations will fade away
But when life makes you struggle
Do not set fire to the hay

One day you will make it through
Close your eyes and look into
What's inside is the real you
A mirror which is always true...

Seems like its just another page
That you are tearing out of rage
Your feelings can't be kept inside
I'll always be there by your side

When your darkest fears come alive
Your aspirations will fade away
As life makes you struggle
Do not set fire to the hay

Reviews

[Hiroshi Masters]

wow nice wordz its a great piece of work

[Shanice]

What a beautiful poem

[Leigh]

Inspiring and full of hope, even in the rough times

[RavenWells]

I did enjoy this :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanq !

[Tina Kline]

Very nicely done. A wonderfully positive poem full of hope and encouragement.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thank you !

[Mizuki Tsukiakari]

Wow, I really really REALLY liked this. I hate to say that it sounds better because it rhymed, but the rhyming really contributed to the piece. It was just so beautiful and moving. Great job :)

[Amanda]

Great job, dude. I really like this, keep up the great writing :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks Amanda !! I needed reviews badly :)
You're a life saver !

[Sid]

Amazing piece...inspirational read...great work!!!

[mknudson]

I think this is really beautiful and the rhyming seems effortless. What inspired this piece?

[Shreyas Tripathy]

I'm not sure ! But I sure am glad you liked it !!!

[CLUTZ]

Gorgeous! I love what you did with this. There's just two things:
this line-" Your hands in my hand" I think it would sound better if you said " your hands in mine..." (just a suggestion) & then this line-" Close your eyes look into", It makes it seem like you cut off part of your line or stopped abruptly. It through me off a little bit. But other then that the poem is excellent.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks for the review ! And thanks for the suggestion. The second flaw that you found, I actually missed a "and" in bw thats why it feels abrupt. Thanks for that :)

[Shreyas Tripathy]

Thanks for the review ! And thanks for the suggestion. The second flaw that you found, I actually missed a "and" in bw thats why it feels abrupt. Thanks for that :)

[CLUTZ]

You're welcome, and that makes more sense. & I'm glad I could help