Freeze Time

Freeze time! Right now, thank you!

Capture this instant -

my life on a Polaroid image.

Now - before it fades.

Oh, this feeling right now

is so positive,

statically charged

makes my hair stand on end

catches my breath,

my soul is electric,

my mind tumbling through

hallucinogenic,

beautiful possibilities;

my heart dancing

a close, muscular tango,

cheek to cheek

with yours.

When I'm with you

the world just closes up shop,

lights out,

shutters down.

Pack up the moon and stars;

quench the sun -

unnecessary distractions.

When I'm in you,

there is no room

even for space itself.

The only enemy is time.

The closeness I feel with you

is a f*****g waste of poetry

pointless squiggly lines of symbols -

laughingly rendered meaningless

in this new, pan-dimensional truth.

We have arrived beyond words

to a new method -

a commune of souls.

Souls who have been chattering -

idly and alone,

like some meaningless fax-tone

for years -

waiting to find a receiver.

This time, right here.

Freeze it, bottle it,

preserve it.

I want to take that Polaroid

and fax it all over the world.

Reviews

[LA Lorena]

wouldn't it indeed be wonderful to truly capture and freeze time when things and love and life were perfect. If you find where that particular button is, please pm me and let me know. It would be nice to know where it is, just on the off chance I ever find myself in that position where I would want to use it again.

[C.R.Turner]

The button part isn't possible, sorry... ;)

[minisla]

It was moving along nicely until you left the road and wrote the fking car off.

[C.R.Turner]

Haha! Poetry is great, but life is great too. Check out my poem 'Me'. ;)

[Yellow Butterfly]

I can feel your vibrant energy throughout this witty write. It's punchy and funny and a very creative way to capture time.

I adore taking photos as much as I adored reading this..... SNAP, CLICK!

[Frieda P]

Never a f*****g waste of poetry, good line! If only we could preserve those moments, and take them out whenever we so choose. Lovely concept.

my mind tumbling through
hallucinogenic,
beautiful possibilities;
my heart dancing
a close, muscular tango,
cheek to cheek

Muscular tango? wooo...nice one!

[C.R.Turner]

Thanks FP. I love occasionally using visceral language to momentarily jolt the reader out of the more conventional poetic 'comfort zones'. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha no worries, I wasn't in the 'comfort' zone from the beginning, it's pretty electric! My pleasure ;-)

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Venting! this word kept jumping around my mind while reading this poem
It needs some kind of a special mood
Still interesting though :)
Good one

PS. just returned from Ireland, Galway... What a country you guys have there? :D