Unknown Enemy

Unknown Enemy

A Poem by Steve L.
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Dedicated to all who suffer silently from depression...

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Insidious mind...
Drowning in darkness no hope...
Inside out it eats.

© 2014 Steve L.


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This could refer to so many things that can hurt a person. Mental illness which can eat away at a person just as an incurable disease. Short but packed with a lot of meaning and insight. The pain isn't always evident for those around, but to the person feeling this, it tears them apart. Nice job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Steve L.

9 Years Ago

Very good insight...I really appreciate your review. Thank you.
Lots to think about in this one. Mental illness is unseen and often hidden in the shadows. Lydi**

Posted 9 Years Ago


Steve L.

9 Years Ago

I agree. Thank you.
Sounds like cancer. Though we know what to call it, we know not what it really is, except to say that it is a monster, an enemy for which all our best efforts to fight seems to fail. What a mouthful you have explained in only eleven words. Masterfully done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


realmwriter

9 Years Ago

I am sorry to hear that. I had my dealings with it as well and it hit me pretty hard at the time. Bu.. read more
Steve L.

9 Years Ago

Thank you. I appreciate it.
realmwriter

9 Years Ago

You are welcome.
You've said so much in so few words. Quite powerful! :) Julie

Posted 9 Years Ago


Steve L.

9 Years Ago

Thank you, Julie. This one hits close to home...
This is really good. A very vivid portrait in a few short words.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Steve L.

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your review. I really appreciate the feedback.
Wow what a guesome tale in such few words. Very interesting read. It's creepy to the core. I can picture some hideous beast devouring a soul then piercing through the skin. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Steve L.

9 Years Ago

You are very welcome.
A whooper of a bloody punch in so few words...'inside out it eats'...well said!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Frieda P

9 Years Ago

My pleasure Steve, I'm always amazed when someone can suck that much emotion out of so few words.
Steve L.

9 Years Ago

It Is definitely a challenge with this type of writing.
Frieda P

9 Years Ago

You should try one of those 10 Words poems...
wow... this one is short and powerful and in such few words accurately depicts the evil nature that is depression... it eats away at your mind until you lose that hope.. some people make the assumption that it is just something that you can just "get over" and choose to feel better, when that is truly not the case... I work in psych nursing and see all to well what it can do to not only the mind but the person as a whole and affect those around them... I am impressed sir..... well done Steve..

Posted 9 Years Ago


Steve L.

9 Years Ago

I agree...It is something that you cannot just get over. A silent assassin it is. Amazing review. Th.. read more
AprilRN1210

9 Years Ago

It is always a pleasure Steve, you're welcome...
Damn, well played again.
Good write buddy, this is a tough demon to crack.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Steve L.

9 Years Ago

Thank you. And yes it is...a lifetime struggle.

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Added on September 19, 2014
Last Updated on September 19, 2014
Tags: Dark, depressed, sorrow, sad

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