The Pit and the Pendulum

I sit in my pit,

Watching the pendulum swing by.

Never asking why.

I sit in my pit.

The pendulum swings back and forth,

Measuring out the time I have left.

Which is leaving me bereft.

Sitting in this pit I am reminded of my life.

My life was so full of strife,

Wasn't much of a life.

More times than not I went astray,

On the righteous path I did not stay.

The pendulum swings on and on,

Marking the time that has gone.

I sit in this pit,

Wondering where I lost my wit.

The joy from my face is no more,

I keep looking at the door.

For you to come swinging in,

For my life to begin.

Reviews

[SleeplessVolcano]

This reminds me of a scripture, "Harvest time has come and gone, and the summer is over, and we still have not yet been delivered".

I found encouragement in this sad write......we often sit and wait for that pendulum to swing.....it can be mind-numbing at times.....

[Jen Walters]

Yes, I thin that's why so many people like this poem because its so relatable. Many people can understand it, and feel it. Thanks for your kind review, and have a great day.

[It's Me, The Miracle]

Though the poem seems to have a sad attire, it reminded me of the time that wont wait for me as I need to look forward towards the door to wait for someone to fill my day. Loved the lines.....You are so good a writer!!!

[Jen Walters]

thank you so much for your kind words, I deeply appreciate them.

[FaeryQueen]

i love this poem! this feels very waiting like i'm waiting for someone.

[Jen Walters]

Thank you so much, I am glad you like my poetry and I love yours too. Thank you for your kind words and have a great day.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

We had a grandfather clock in the house when I was young.
It not only marked time but also seemed to "tsk, tsk" instead of "tic, toc"
Good poem Jen.

[Mary]

Very sad poem, but well done. A passive non-participant is certain to lose his/her joy and wit. We all go there occasionally, but hopefully we can lift, drag, or claw our way out of the pit.

[Jen Walters]

Thanks so much for your kind words of appreciation. Yes this pit is something we can all relate to at one time or another hopefully though we don't sit or get lost in this pit. Have a great day.

[Neythan Cardoso]

This is very well set up I like it a lot and I like the marriage tie in there at the end if thats what i picked up.

[Jen Walters]

Thanks so much for your review, and this seems to be one of the favorites among you all. Have a wonderful day.

[Michael Stevens]

So true, this, love can makes you crazy!

[Jen Walters]

thanks for your kind words. So many people seem to like this poem. Its amazing and wonderful. I deeply appreciate your comments. Have a great day.

[Michael Stevens]

I think they like it so much, because most people can relate to it!

[Jen Walters]

this maybe true, either way I deeply appreciate yours and everyone else's comments. Have a great day.

[Michael Stevens]

Thanks, and you do the same!

[Pharos]

a well rhymed poetry of loneliness and despair. well written!

[Jen Walters]

thanks for your comments, I deeply appreciate them. Please feel free to check out my other poetry as well. Have a great day.

[Miss Sharon]

A powerful yet bittersweet write with a touch of deep despair I feel. Never give up hope for things to change for the better...anything can happen when we get back on that "righteous path!" ~Sharon

[Jen Walters]

Thanks so much for your encouraging words, this poem is not about losing hope not really the intent was to communicate what one might feel when in the pit of despair but in the end hope is always found again. Thanks for the comment and feel free to browse my other poetry and have a great day.

[Miss Sharon]

Sorry I misinterpreted your nice poem but would you please show me the lines in the poem that speak of having hope again?

[Jen Walters]

the last couple I think about waiting for someone to come swinging in and waiting for life to begin at least I think they ring of hope and don't apologize for a misinterpretation. I deeply appreciate all of your wonderful comments.

[Diana]

Lovely and truly poignant. Very relatable!