Net Work

A poem about.... how an adolescent think

Net Work

 

Work of networks

Make me sick

Visible networks

Fails to connect me the quirk

 

Father, mother, brother, sister

A delicate network

But a strong ‘love work’

Never did I feel sick

Though I am trapped in it.

 

Teacher, friends, physics, chemistry

Biology, sociology, math home work

The nefarious network makes me sick

Unable to play, laugh and giggle

 

Network of amorous thoughts

Lingered around my study desk

Upon which sat my lover

Smiling out of a photo frame work

 

I cant think

I cant perk

I cant sulk

I have home work

I will get berserk..

 

I want to snap

Each network with a click

They suffocate me to death

I want to fly west, east, south, north

Where freedom took its birth…

Reviews

[Richard Williams]

A network of "clique" can get to you as you so well express. You use some good descriptions here and make the point well. It is dynamic with "I want to snap / Each network with a click".

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

It's all about networks these days: business networking, computer networks and social networks. You've managed to catch it all.

I do really like the idea of a "love work" containing family members. Although, like many of us yours sounds like a bit of a nightmare! There's also a nice touch where you explain how these networks can make you feel restricted, "unable to play, laugh and giggle". It seems like everybody has had some problem with FaceBook or some similar network strangling their ability to behave normally or feel at ease as they've so over/under exposed!

My only criticism... It's exactly that. How about do one of your fans a favour and writing something without an ellipsis! I really like reviewing your poems but... it's just... well... you know... try... please!

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digital and physical networks are the pathways to our lives..good write

[The Analog Kid]

Breaking free from the broken network. I can see the teenager railing against the family and school constraints. Very different, but in a good way:)

[Coyote Poetry]

The term networking always scared me. We may need networking in business. In real life we need listening and good friends. I agree with the emotion and desire of this poem. We need more friends and long conversations for the sake of friendship. Not to make profit and contacts for the next deal. A excellent poem. I like it.
Coyote

[Hello, Goodbye]

I heard that..

[Helena]

A jaunty, lively poem. Stream of thoughts flowing beautifully. Really enjoyed this Jeny. Well done!

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good work..!!

[Ruth]

Heck yes, I can understand the emotion behind this love! Well versed love! Well paced too, hugs xx

[Dream Weaver]

Ah the love of network and networking...it's enough
to drive anyone insane...You've captured the craziness
perfectly.. :P