Trapped

I try to get out, I’m looking past everyone’s eyes, I look around to see if I see you.

 

I try to get out, I try to breathe, but I can’t and I wonder what’s wrong with me?

 

and I see everyone looking my way like if I’m going crazy. They can see I’m trapped,

 

They can see I’m dying inside, they can see it in my eyes.

 

But why?

 

I try to get out of this locked door, I try too see but everything is a blur.

 

And I ask God why he’s putting me through this?

 

And I ask him and he does not answer me.

 

and then I try to get out again because I’m trapped.

 

trapped in a door and I try to see but everything is a blur.

 

and I ask myself ” what’s wrong “

 

and my answer is always unknown

 

and I can’t seem to get out of this trapped door.

 

and I can’t stop having all of these thoughts, and I can’t I just cannot…

 

and all my eyes see is a blur

 

Because I’m trapped , and I can’t seem to open this door♥

Author's Note

what do you think?

Reviews

[MissWordSmith]

sounds like a recurring dream you know. the kind where you always reach a certain point but never beyond that. though this was one of the most unique poems I have read here, i will say that it worked. I don't know how, it just did.
the feeling of being trapped and so weak and unsure came out very, very well.
I'd say this was a daring, and unique write that turned out better than I would have imagined.
kudos on being original!

[Voice]

i know this feeling. great write. sad.

Voice

[Hippy]

yeah i liked it showed what seemed to me a side of depression which is a bvery easy topic to write on

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

you have a very beautiful gift:)

This was decent. I mean, the idea that she is trapped is obvious, but why is she trapped is the recuring question? Leaving the readers to think about why exactly shes trapped, or who is trapping her? perfect imaging and you captured the readers wondering thoughts. But, in my opinion, it was still only decent. I don't want that to be too harsh, but it is still sounding like a middle schoolers essay.

[Kenny L. Mitchell]

This feels like a song. If you put music to this...it would be classic! But as a poem..it's simply...STELLAR. You have a gift. Don't abuse it...USE it. GREAT work lady! Impressive!

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is powerful. I like the feel of being lock up and wanting a way to escape. Sometime we must climb the wall and run like hell. I like the conversation and feeling of no escape. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[DareToDream]

I really like this! Its really touching, my favorite line is "whats wrong and my answer is always unknown"--its very creative. I hope ur able to get out of your trapped door soon : )

[rockinmiley555]

this is both sad, inspiring and a little bit hopeful. i like this write. sometimes god wont answere your prayers/questions but he will always be there for the hardest part. remember that.

[Khaotic Katastrophe]

the things i look for the most is flow, imagery, and emotion; you have all of them. good write!