Hangin'

I'm starin at the phone

Waiting for you to text back

Been like this all night

I'm beggin you please

Don't leave me hangin

Like you did last time

There's an opportunity 

And I wanna take it

Let's see what this was about

Don't you wanna see me

Like I need to see you yeah

Please don't turn me down

Cuz I'm goin crazy

Am I crazy

To wanna see you now

After everything

I love you baby

I need to see you now

Don't leave hangin

Did you love me?

Or was it just all a game?

Did you mean what you said?

Or was I conveniently just far enough away?

I'm goin crazy

Am I crazy

To wanna see now

After everything

I still love you baby

I need to see you now

Don't leave me hangin

This chance won't come again

This is your only shot

I won't hang around all day

You're either in or you're not

Are you crazy

Did you even love me?

You don't wanna see me

After everything

I just need you baby

You never loved me

You left me hangin

Reviews

[Ruby Heggie (PB Jacobs)]

Documentation
4/5/18
6:58 PM U.S. CST
"My Review of Hangin' by Sophy, A Fellow Writer's Cafe Author"
by PB Jacobs (www.writerscafe.org)

Hey, Sophy

Well, um, I'm seeing dummy romance written all over this. Just don't take it as an insult, as I listen to a lot of music, and I mean a lot, and it all boils down to a majority of it being the same old boy meets girl, inward trail sign romance, with territorial instincts mixed in, for good measure.

You need to write from a different field of interest (rhetorical outfit), audience-wise, instead of the same old, same old, Mad Scientist Personality Type melodrama. Same field's, same humanity, if you really think about it, from there to here, especially in the mainstream media humanity.

I'd also consider things like affective saturation and intensity, in addition to field's. Your affective rhetoric is too consistent and stereotypical.

I don't know about you, but I'm the type of person who needs a new outfit, every now and then.

Don't take my review as an insult, as it's modern input. No need to fritter and wallow. Reality and fact's will prevail, instead of the same old Doctor's wanting the same old grants, with the same old terms and condition's, and if you really think about it, without the usual dummy, or better comeback's, ruthless coddler maneuver's, etc. I make perfect sense.

Dude, Your New Era! It can also mean on a personal level!

A Golden Rule of Life: If you don't get this right, you're gonna get screwed over! by Anonymous

Pb Jacobs

[The Nude Writer]

Haha this is awesome! A very modern love story :)