Out with the Old, In with the New

Out with the Old, In with the New

A Chapter by SpeedyHobbit Armstrong
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Folco thinks he's in trouble when he's sent to the headmaster, but instead is sent home, where he learns news that will soon change his life and Dremeadow forever.

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                Folco emitted a breathy sigh, scuffling the toe of his boot into the wooden floor of the classroom and turning his eyes toward the window. The sun was high in the sky, beating down on the dry-looking grass.  He wiped a few beads of sweat from his forehead. Could whoever built this place not have built the schoolhouse better, he thought, so that the students would not have to suffer through the intense heat of August?


                At least, he thought, the teacher had finally stopped talking about the End-of-Summer picnic that was held for students and their parents prior to their release from school for harvest season. He was excited about the end of the summer, for it meant both that he would not have to deal with the tedium of schoolwork until November and that he would no longer be in the youngest year of upper school. However, the prospect of sitting alone bored out of his mind while his friends were all with their families like nearly every other year was nothing short of torture. He knew better than to expect either of his parents to be there. His mother, perhaps, if the timing was very lucky. His father? Not a chance in the world. He was always too busy doing political business with the rest of the Council to do anything with Folco or his older siblings.


                However, that did not mean listening to the teacher drone on about Drémeadow’s trade relations with Rheeding in the 2800s was any more of interest. Besides, he was hungry and wanted the bell to start ringing in the bell-tower so they could leave for the day. Perhaps Ted, Bingo, Lindo and Rufus would want to go to the bakery.


                Unfortunately, according to both the sun’s position in the sky and the clock, there was still about two hours of boredom, hunger, and staring at the back of Lily Ferthing’s neck in store before the happy tolls of freedom.


                With a surreptitious glance at the teacher, who was now writing several dates on the board, Folco slipped his hand into his pocket, fumbling for the handkerchief he knew contained several wafers he had wrapped to snack on in class at times the teacher was not looking, and began to slip it out of his pocket.


                Then, to his horror, the handkerchief opened on bottom, spilling the bread on the floor. Eyes widening, Folco bent sideways to start picking up the evidence before he was spotted. As he did so, Dora Hugwort whispered “you’re not supposed to have food” from the desk across the aisle.


Folco rolled his eyes. “So what?” he whispered before resuming gathering the pieces of the food into a pile. How could Ted possibly want to have a girl who always felt the need to preach about class rules for his sweetheart? For that matter, why would anyone want a sweetheart, period? His older sisters and brother had all had at least one- more than one at the same time in Odo’s case- but Folco for the life of him could not fathom what others saw in such things.


              “Folco Foxtrot!”


                The hobbit jumped, straightening up to look at the teacher while hastily shoving the handkerchief into his pocket. There were a few telltale crumbs on the ground still, but this would have to do. “Yes, Mrs.  Littleman?” he said innocently.


                Mrs. Littleman fixed him with a beady-eyed stare that only teachers and his father could pull off so well. “Why are you under your desk when you are supposed to be paying attention to the lesson?”


                “I erm… dropped my quill,” Folco lied, knowing that his teacher would not be at all thrilled to hear that he had spilled contraband food all over the floor.


                She replied by fixing her student with a long gaze. Folco concentrated all his willpower on maintaining eye contact. “You dropped your quill, Mrs Littleman, or ma’am” she said emphatically.


                “Yes ma’am. Sorry, ma’am,” Folco mumbled, relieved.  He had already been castigated earlier in the day for passing notes with Bingo and Lindo after Mrs. Littleman spotted him taking the folded parchment from Merrick Lagworth.


Satisfied, the teacher resumed her lecture about a pact between Rheeding and Drémeadow from nearly two centuries previous.  Folco struggled to pay attention, but it was not easy. He glanced over his right shoulder to look at Rufus, who was predictably staring at Dora’s glossy auburn hair, then his left to see what Bingo and Lindo were up to. Ted, he already knew, would be ever the perfect student, copying everything Mrs. Littleman said.


Lindo sent Folco a pained face when their eyes met.  “This is boring,” he mouthed.


“I know. Is it dismissal yet?” Folco replied, doing a silent impression of a yawn.


“FOXTROT!”


The boy snapped his head around to the teacher, painfully aware of the entire class looking expectantly in his direction. He opened his mouth to apologize for the second time in five minutes, but the teacher was already upbraiding him. “You need to be more mindful of class rules. I never had this problem with Odo or Jillian,” Mrs. Littleman scolded.


Folco sank down slightly in his seat, cheeks reddening. Why was it that teachers always had to bring up at least one of his older siblings? If it was not saying that he was not as well-mannered or well-behaved as most of them in class, it was pointing out  that he was not as smart and athletic as Xenia, or as good with detail as Nora, or as secure and confident as Odo , or as popular as Jillian had been.  Having such things pointed out in front of the whole class was especially humiliating. He wanted to open his mouth to point out that he was not any of them, but decided he would only be in more trouble.


“Well?” Mrs. Littleman demanded. “Have you anything you need to share with the class?”


The student was about to answer in the negative when a knock sounded at the door. Folco chanced a glance in Lindo and Bingo’s direction as Mrs. Littleman went to answer the highly welcome interruption. Both were giving him sympathetic stares.  As the instructor stepped outside, a few whispers broke out around the room. Fern Gardner was leaning over Folco’s desk from behind to show Lily  a sketch she had made. Folco turned sideways to duck out of the girls talking across him, catching Rufus’ eye and exaggeratedly swiping the air in front of his forehead  in mock-relief.


                When Mrs. Littleman reentered, the class fell instantaneously silent. “Folco Foxtrot.”


                “Yes, ma’am?” he queried, wondering what he was supposed to have done now.

                “Please go to the Headmaster’s office. Bring your lunch pail, cloak and books with you.”


                Folco’s stomach  seemed to drop to his toes, and the beginnings of anger stirred within him. Was he actually being ejected from class for the day over a little bit of talking, a theoretical dropped quill and passing notes? “But…”


                “Go.


                Folco sighed slightly, closing his history book. He directed a grimace at all four of his friends before proceeding to the cloakroom to gather the rest of his belongings to bring to the office. He hoped that he would not be sent home with a note about his misbehavior. His parents would be livid.

~*~*~


                Folco dragged his feet through the schoolhouse corridor the entire way to the headmaster,  making a point of glancing into  all the upper school classrooms he passed, delaying the unpleasant meeting as long as possible. Far too soon, he found himself in front of the door of Will Marvitop, otherwise known as Old Marvi. The headmaster had been called that for at least thirteen years; his oldest sister Nora's contemporaries had used the same nickname.   There were also variations such as "Old Marv" and "the Marvimaster," not to mention the very rude variations Xenia and her friends had for him in their later years of upper school, variations Folco had known even as young as six would get them verbally obliterated by their father if he ever overheard.


Swallowing hard in dread of facing the austere hobbit, the lad knocked three times. “Enter,” came the crisp voice of the headmaster. Gulping, Folco pulled the door open. To his surprise, the headmaster was not the sole occupant. His seventeen-year-old brother was there as well, standing in front of the desk. What is Odo doing here? Had his Upper Five brother managed to get into trouble also? Or was something worse wrong? Folco still remembered the day Bingo  had been pulled from class and sent home to learn that his father had been killed in a farming accident as clearly as though it had not been three years ago. He stared at Odo, who stared back, surprised.


                “Sit.” Both Foxtrots sat, staring nervously at each other.  “A message has been sent here asking that you both return home for the day. A cart has been sent for you two and should arrive shortly.”


                “What’s going on, sir?” asked Odo.


                The headmaster looked uncomfortable. “Well, it isn’t really my place to tell you... I would prefer to leave it to your family.”


                Folco exchanged a look of fright with his older brother. Had something happened to one of his parents or sisters while he and Odo were at school? “Is it bad?” he asked. The headmaster did not reply, but busied himself with paperwork. Folco gave the headmaster an exasperated look.  “We aren’t in trouble, sir?”


                “No, neither of you are in any trouble” the headmaster said. The two Foxtrots exchanged another long look. “But you are both to wait here until the carriage arrives.”

~*~*~


                It was half an hour before the carriage showed up. Folco spent most of that time alternating between exchanging silent looks of worry with his older brother and staring pensively at the ceiling, wondering what was going on. His mother would be at home with his two oldest sisters, Jillian would be in class at Browntower University in Baur, and Odo was right here next to him. His father, Folco knew, was cloistered in yet another Council session. Had there been some kind of accident? Had something bad happened with the Council? Why were they bidden to wait for a carriage rather than walking home or hiring a pony-drawn cart to go home themselves? Odo had the money to do so; their parents always had him carry it in case they needed to leave before school was dismissed.


                When word reached the headmaster’s that it had finally come, Folco picked up his lunch pail, satchel and books and mutely followed Odo out. To his confusion, the headmaster followed them, not detaching from his students until they were at the door. Even then, he watched them descend the steps. Folco frowned. He wished he would leave him alone with his brother so he and Odo could speculate about the situation away from adult ears.


                He was even more confused when he saw that there was two hobbits he vaguely recognized, a gentlehobbit and a lady, in addition to the driver. One of them disembarked, taking both his and Odo’s belongings. Folco watched the middle-aged porter climb back on quizzically before he and Odo climbed in after them. Why had his father hired one for the day? They carried their things for themselves all the time.


                “What happened?” Folco asked the gentlehobbit who had taken their bags and books.


                He was met only with an unfathomable glance before he responded, “Your mother and father said they wish you to hear first from them.”


                “All right, then…” It sounded as though his parents, at least, were safe. “Are my sisters well?”


               “They are,” the porter said evasively. “By the way, I apologize for not introducing myself. My name is Nicolo Harrow. This is Ermangine Shaker and the driver is Leisa Meadowhopper.”


                “Pleasure,” said  Odo. Folco echoed the salutation. “My name is Odo Foxtrot and this is my brother Folco.”


                “We know, sir” said Mistress Shaker. “Thank you for your kind introduction, however.”


                Folco had not imagined it possible to feel so bewildered. Had she actually addressed Odo as though he were grown when he was so obviously not, given the schoolbooks and bags?


Odo looked utterly pleased.

~*~*~


When they arrived at the spacious house and the two lads had been seen inside by the doorman, Folco and Odo found their parents in the sitting-room with Nora and Xenia. Someone had moved the loveseat, and the Foxtrot parents were in it, directly facing their children. One of the family servants was beside his father taking mumbled instructions. Folco took a seat alongside Xenia, Odo on his other side. “What happened?” he whispered. Xenia shook her head, shrugging, before slouching back into the long sofa.


“I will tell them now,” said Hrothgar Foxtrot to Malla. “Please see that this message is on its way to Jillian today; I wish her to hear what has happened as soon as possible and to make arrangements to sit her examinations early if at all possible. You may go.”  The servant gave a slight bow before departing.


Xenia wasted no time in demanding “what happened? Why are you being all mysterious?”


“Quiet. I cannot explain with you talking,” her father said. Xenia puckered her brow but obeyed.


“Now, I have just been sitting in a very lengthy Council session discussing the state of affairs…”


Xenia interjected, “Tell us something else we don’t already know!” Folco nudged her slightly; the overworked look on their father’s face warned that he was not to be trifled with today.


“Xenia! Silence!” At the same time, Xenia returned the elbow, but said nothing.


Hrothgar heaved a long sigh. “Now then. Many things were discussed in this meeting…”


The words Folco’s father spoke soon seemed to blur together. There were many things said that Folco  could not comprehend because they were too much in the language of adults and had too much to do with politics, which he had yet to entirely understand. The youth squirmed and Odo gave a slight kick.


One statement, however, did stand out amongst the mumbojumbo about treaties, legislations, mandates, statutes, articles,  and sections. One that even Folco knew was a very drastic statement indeed.


“After much deliberation , debate, and weighing the pros and cons of the idea, a decision was ratified by the Council,” said Hrothgar. “We decided it would be best if the Council were to disband.


“The Council… disband?” echoed Nora.  The 27-year-old went very straight in her seat, staring.


“So who’s in charge of Drémeadow, then, if there’s no Council? Does this mean we don’t elect people anymore or something?” queried Odo.


“The new king. And no, no more elections.” Folco let out a small breath. He knew how stressed his father always was at the time of elections. He was never home when those were going on. Perhaps, he thought, this meant he would be home more often.


Xenia made a sudden movement.  Finding his voice, Folco asked, “who’s that? Or did you not vote about that yet, if there’s even a…? ”


“They have” interrupted their mother, Arabella Foxtrot.


Xenia, whose eyebrows were raised high, asked “And who might that be?”


“Your father.”

               

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© 2014 SpeedyHobbit Armstrong


Author's Note

SpeedyHobbit Armstrong
Please give me any constructive criticism you can think of as well as comments on strengths you notice. I hope to be a published author one day, so I want this book and all of my books to become awesome and as close to perfect as is humanly possible.

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Good stuff in this opening chapter. Draws you in and makes you want to continue on.

Looks like you slipped a paste though. You said "There were also variations such as "Old Marv" and "the Marvimaster," There were also variations such as "Old Marv" and "the Marvimaster," not to mention the very rude variations Xenia and her friends had for him..."

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SpeedyHobbit Armstrong

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Whoops, on fixing that!



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thank you so much for submitting to my contest! I very much enjoyed this read!!!
unfortunately I can only have one winner so.....
thanks for entering!!!
Keep up the fabulous work!
-Dragon

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SpeedyHobbit Armstrong

10 Years Ago

Aww, thanks so much for the sweet review, Dragon! (=
" otherwise known as Old Marvi long before Folco had started school." Better way of stating he was being called this before the started school? Other than that the writing flowed very nicely. Enjoyed the first of this. On to the next! You have a very creative mind.

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Aw, thank you for the review! I've decided to try out the following text for rewording:

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10 Years Ago

"Far too soon, he found himself in front of the door of Will Marvitop, otherwise known as Old Marvi... read more
The first chapter is indeed interesting and I had thought Folco's father would have been chosen for high powerful post.

You have written it in interesting way and nicely described the boredom in class especially when it makes hungry too which i guess each of us will have experienced it.

i wish to read it to the last, so do req me always when you so that i dont miss it.

best wishes



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Prritiy

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You are welcome.
yes it was never fun, though now we seem to smile over those incidents as it .. read more
SpeedyHobbit Armstrong

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Yes, we most certainly do, don't we! And I feel very certain Folco will find these annoyances trivi.. read more
SpeedyHobbit Armstrong

9 Years Ago

I've also sent a request for chapter 4 as per your request
You have so much talent and the way you set the format for the first chapter is great. You are amazing with describing things without making them sound bland and you don't do over kill to where the description is mundane. I feel that there is so much I can learn from you. xo Winter

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Thank you for honoring me with such a kind review! I'm glad I pulled off an appropriate balance betw.. read more
this is good but i like to read about vampires

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Vampires can be fun [=
*spoiler alert*

There is the possibility of one cropping .. read more
I like "the happy tolls of freedom." I also really like the names you've come up with for all the characters. People tend to get into ruts with names, but these all feel fresh and believable. AND, even though there are a ton of characters introduced at once, I didn't feel totally overwhelmed by it. Somehow, it was clear which ones were important for the moment. I expect the others show up and get more attention later, which as a reader will be neat, because there will be a little hint of familiarity built in to their re-introduction. Very cool.

I also like that they're hobbits. It doesn't change anything for me so far, but it added a lot of flavor to the story.

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Thank you so much for the review! Yes, I definitely hoped to emphasize which characters would prove .. read more
Very intriguing first chapter. I like the amount of dialogue. So many writers start out with a description overload in the first chapter, and I like that you jump right into the story and sneak the description and background in.
I do think that some of the dialogue is a little too on-the-nose, and a little wordy, which I think is taking away some of the characters' voice.
There are a few repetition issues, like "he thought" twice in a row first paragraph and "however" twice in a row second paragraph.
Great start, interesting premise and I look forward to more!

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Thank you for the review! I appreciate your alerting me to the repetition in particular as I know th.. read more
Its wonderful. The descriptions are very clear. I could picture what was happening clearly in my mind and i think that's very important! I would definitely want to read the next chapter!

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Thank you so much! Your review, and everyone else's, are very encouraging. Will have 2 up ASAP!
Great! I wasn't sure what I thought of this at first, but read through it twice and I think the concept is brilliant. Very interested to find out how your protagonist reacts to this change in his life; lot's of potential. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!

Regarding your question about whether to reveal more in the last paragraph I think it's pretty clear although when Xenia asked "And who might that be?" I initially thought she was asking about the "they" who had voted. Minor quibble though :)


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Thank you so much for the review! I'm hoping my next chapter (currently in outline stage) also does .. read more
ansley2408

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No problem. Cool, looking forward to it!
SpeedyHobbit Armstrong

10 Years Ago

Thank you! [=
It is kind of confusing as to what time period it is, but I think it is a great plot and will make a very interesting story

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This is a fantasy world I've been creating. [= In this country in this universe, it's a sort of sett.. read more

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