Creative Darkness

If there is a grammar problem I would like you to tell me exactly where it is. Telling me oh you have grammar problems you need to add commas cause you need some. Is not helping me, I legit cannot see grammatical issues so I have no idea what you're talking about. But that's all. Tell me what you think about it! I would love to know be as critical as you want. I want this future novel to be the best it can be and it can't with out your help! So thank you in advance! Lastly! The content of each chapter is subject to change.