A Pile of Bodies

A poem about losing a loved one.

A pile of bodies went out of style. The trigger pulled as many times I could before I left for a while. Now down the halls of the whole damn place. Went up in flames, now a complete disgrace. It's where my best friend committed suicide. It's where my girlfriend eventually died. Everything that I love is gone, so I'm taking it all back! Carry on my soon to be. Both betrothed, hell waits for me. Not enough for me to be. Not enough, enough for me to care at all.

Reviews

[Courtney Hough]

This reminds me of american horror story! But i really like how your poems are structured. You have good flow without being traditional.

[splattercore]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it too, it just feels more natural. I'm not much for planning. My words are like a big mess, so a formal structure at first just complicates the vision. Haha!

[Evan M.]

This is the first time I've commented on your writing, though I've read a few of your pieces. I must admit you have a very interesting way with it. I enjoy the way you say exactly what you mean and don't hide anything. It let's everything out and I'm sure this is what draws me to it. Keep writing like this and you'll be pulling in all kinds of people

[splattercore]

Hell yeah! You've got to leave it all on the field. If you don't somebody else will. Then you'll be wondering about what could have been. You just to jump right in, not thinking about anything else. Thank you for your words of encouragement!

[Evan M.]

It's similar to my writing in that way lol I don't structure it, I feel it

[siobhan]

Brilliant, really liked this. As you said on my comment this brought back memories, some good, some bad. But this was really good:-)
Keep writing!

[splattercore]

Wow! Thank you so much for the read! I'm glad you felt something through this text. You too! I really like your style! Keep at it!

[siobhan]

No worries! And yourself :-)