Liberation

Let me be free

In the world of liberating possibilities

I don't need a 5-9 job

To make me who you want me to be

Let me travel the world

And Feel the sheer wanderlust

Drop my duties

Of an organized life

Take the status happy

Good job

3 kids

A spouse 

And a house to live in

Cause here thats all we really need

Isn't it?

Maybe I'm a little crazy

But I've been thinking maybe

I'd choose my version of happy 

and I'd live that way instead

And while you waste to ashes

Trying to meet society's needs

I'll be in some unknown world

Washing away my worries

Either way we'll waste to ashes 

And be one with the grasses

And I'm pretty sure

You aren't making much of an impact

At a 9-5 job til retirement either

Author's Note

im not exactly.. sure about this one at all it just kind of happened yeah ok feedback please <3

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

This has a universal feel to it, making it very relate-able...I think everyone has these thoughts from time to time but you've brought them all together here with poetic flare...nicely done :)

[Simon Welsh]

Life ends in ashes. Nice one.

[Tai Ryens]

Your perspective reminds me of Sylvia Plath. She feared being stuck in a kitchen making food for her children and being restricted from work by the government. She downright despised it, actually.
As I always advise; determination is everything. If you want it badly enough, you'll get it.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

I hear you. It's post-modern reflective; in a good way. It takes a certain kind of audience but, hey, I'm sure you've found a sample here and rest assured, they know it's an articulate commentary put into a delicate prose that fits well into that special place in our mental cupboards. The one right next to the "status happy." The muses embrace you, Kristin! :)

[plainme]

That's a definitely a pearl! 'And be one with the grasses', wonderful imagery. I love that part! Of course the poem in it's whole is very well written, vivid images and clear thoughts, tremendous flow of words! Well done!

[Emrick]

Lovely poem Kristin.
(I learned something from this which everybody should be practicing it.
"I'd choose my version of happiness" .To be really happy you must define happiness on your own way not copying your neighbor or friend.