12-16-13

You said to stop drinking

Because it'll kill me
And I don't know if its because I want to die

Or if it makes me feel more alive

But it helps

Keep me sane

It will slowly

Shut me down

Burning my throat

Breaking through my blood stream

Killing my liver 
Leaving me at the kiss of death

You told me to stop drinking

But its all I have left

Reviews

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Well, that's just ... I have all of these street, sailor and railroad phrases to use but I'm going to restrain myself. Better to walk forever on a beach. Think about it. A really nice and icky thought-poem.

100 deathly kisses

[plainme]

I feel as if this poem lacks depth. I keep rereading the lines separately, together, in bulk but I can't find it. Maybe that's what the poem is ment to reflect. Who says poems have to always go deep and can't be straight to the point. Have to say this one is original, but again, it isn't. I do like it, don't get me wrong. It's just clear like the sky. I enjoyed reading it and thinking it through.

[Tai Ryens]

I particularly like how the piece indicates a caring companion in the beginning, then suggests that the very same person has abandoned you save for their words which haunt you in their absence..