we lasted an eternity

a young man with a rose for a soul found me
painting in the ashes of a forest.

he won't stop
running his fingers through his
faded sunflower hair,
and when I ask him why
he looks so lost,
he leads me to a garden
where we plant our feet in
the freshly-turned earth.
I tell him that I want to paint
his lips blue
and he laughs,
but it comes out
as a croak and it
startles him to the
point of tears.

I reach out and wrap my hands
around his,
but thorns press into my skin.
his eyes scream no and the
ice in his veins spreads to mine,
so I pull away and leave him
to bury his tired old self
alive.

I return to the garden later
in search of the man,
but all I find is a rose bush
sprouting from the earth
and a gold wedding band
that I slip into my back pocket
and sell to the daughter of a
drunken man a few days later.

Author's Note

One of the more favoured poems that I've written. Any feedback is appreciated! Thanks for reading.

Reviews

[Emilie Sturm]

So I looked through your works, and this one definitely is my favourite!! Although you have only used simple words, the imagery is fantastic :) In addition, I like how you put beautiful covers on every poem you've written, it captures the moment and mood. Keep writing poems, I enjoy reading yours.

[heylel]

Thank you so much!! This is one of my favourites as well, I''m really glad you like it!

[PenguinEmpiress]

aw.. that's so sad :c BUT I LOVE IT!! WHY!!? THESE FEELS!! It nearly made me cry :c but i still love it~ it's so pretty, but tragic :)

(Why am i smiling, you weirdo stop it! don't smile!)

[Rose]

This is so good!! It's so creative and elegant.

[heylel]

Thank you so much! I'm very glad you like it! :)