5 Minute Messy-piece

What do you write about in five minutes?

 

Maybe the latest world news,

Or what to do this weekend.

Who I saw at the mall today,

The trip I took down memory lane.

 

Maybe some romance drama!

That's always good for some punch...

But romance, I have none.

Let's watch that topic die.

 

I have nothing interesting to say,

Nothing clever or quippy to share.

Guess I'll just submit this mess....

 

 

 

And cross my fingers.

Author's Note

Written for a 5 minute contest.

Reviews

[Jonathan Ballam]

Playful, energetic and honest. I liked the ending the most! It's ironic you refer to this piece as messy. For five minutes I think it's a more tidy.

I also like the fact that you don't take yourself too seriously. Many poets that do end up infecting there work, or turn out to become bitter people. This deserves a hundred percent, imo.

;)

[Andrew'sWonderland]

I really love the spontaneity of this write!! Simple, but so so sweet!! Great Job!!!

[deeps]

But romance, I have none.
Let's watch that topic die.

This right here made me laugh
This is amusing and very lovely
I like this.

[Ama May Cooper]

haha i thought this was rather amusing and funny actually

[H]

Haha! I think it's very quirky and maybe it even reflects your personality.

"Let's watch that topic die."

[TeenRomance]

:-) Very cute.

[Flo_writer]

Oh I got carried away...I like your poem, you portrayed vivid thoughts in a clear short amount of time.

[Flo_writer]

Did you come across the contest and then write this in the next five minutes? umm let me try...

I wish i had a stop watch so I could be fair
nothing else to do so I'm here
on the writers hot spot
staring clear of writers block
I know people hate when a word is used twice
so I do it just for spite, lol.
I'm clearly troublesome
No fear when staring down the barrel of a gun
But hopefully if the trigger is squeeze I'm hit in the vest
I'm done in five minutes or less.

Lol.

[Yun]

Love how spontaneous this poem feels. I especially love:

"But romance, I have none.
Let's watch that topic die."

This part really speaks to me, as I often sit down to write something and begin with an idea that doesn't work, and it can be frustrating; the concept of watching these things die is a refreshing and very satisfying take on this idea.

[deleted]

I loved the originality of this piece. It flowed perfectly until its ending. I love lipless thoughts that speak so loudly. You have a beautiful gift.