Undying Love

Undying Love

A Poem by KAREN

Two people growing old together!


From the very begining you had my heart,

I fell in love with you the minute I laid eyes on you

         My palms were sweaty

         My legs became weak

         My heart rate  grew rapid


I wondered if you felt the same,

but when you walked up to me, I knew.......

        The palms of your hands were damp

        Your body trembled in my embrace

        your heart beat echoed in my ears


There was so many things about you I loved

          Black hair

                       silky skin

                                    sexy body

            angelic voice


But those aren't the only things I fell in love with,

your just as beautiful on the inside




    So sweet


Through the years we have changed,

but our love for one another hasn't

              Grey hair

                          Wrinkled skin

        Crippled body

                           Quivering voice


But when I look at you,

I still see someone that is....





                    So sweet


Now that your time with me is coming to an end,

my heart  is breaking into

I don't want to go on without you,

but my darling wife,

I'll love you forever,

and I'll see you soon








© 2010 KAREN

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A beautiful poem of love. My Grandparent were marry for almost 70 years. He would look at her with love. The poem flowed very well. You told a kind and beautiful story of love. Few people are lucky enough to know this great pleasure. A outstanding poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago

This is amazing, I liked this it was very touching

Posted 12 Years Ago

very dramatic and emotional; the feelings leaped off the page from the first line of giving away all of it from the first moment....you kept the rhythm throughout the piece by finishing with the word love, forever and soon.

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like the way it was set up! What a touching piece of writing, I was in awe~~ :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago

Amazing bravo!

Posted 12 Years Ago

I love how this poem is set up. It gives the poem a nice feel. This is a gorgeous peom. Very good!

Posted 12 Years Ago

So sweet. and tender... the circle of life, wrapped gently in a lifetime of love...
Well done... well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago

this is so sweet and sad i loved it so much you really made it so i could picture it in my head this is really cute i loved it amazing job :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

well, blizzard be damned, you just warmed me up

Posted 12 Years Ago

Oh wow..this is so beautiful. So sad, yet so happy. Excellent write.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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21 Reviews
Added on December 11, 2010
Last Updated on December 11, 2010
Tags: love, old, beautiful, heart



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