Day By Day

what will happen next?

Yesterday was.......

blissful like chimes blowing in the fall breeze.

Or taking a walk at twilight,

the sun giving off soft hazy light.

Laughter spilling over like an broken dam.

Array of flowers sprouting along the narrow grassy path.

                      

                             Prosperous

                             Safe

                              Happy

 

Yesterday was cherished.

 

Today is........

destructive like a tornado sucking away happiness.

Going under water for the thrid time, gasping for air.

Rain hitting me in the face,

feeling like needles.

Encircled by enemies,

staring evil and wickedness my way.

 

                             Scary

                              Sad

                              Ugly

 

Today is a nightmare

 

Tomorrow will be........

prosperous, no worries about providing for my family.

Safe from all the ugliness of the world.

Happy  just being me.

Scary,  finding myself without a job.

Sad, the one I love is taken from me.

Ugly, all the unfriendly people in my life  are ganging up on me.

 

Life is short, live for  all the days of your life,

and live it to the fullest.

 

Author's Note

Not sure abot this poem. tell me what you think!

Reviews

[iamcarolfierce]

"Life is short, live for all the days of your life,
and live it to the fullest."

Life is really short. Thanks for reminding me this. I should do what I could and make no room for regrets right? :)

"Happy just being me."

This is my other fav'rite line. I love this.

[Undying Glory]

this was very good work, just great. i just love the whole message of this poem, and we really should seize every passing day! let tomorrow be better than today, God willing.
awesome!

[cassandra violet]

There was a lot I really liked about this poem. The first was the structure, the flow of this piece was nice because you took a break from longer lines to include lines that consisted of only one word. As a reader its refreshing to have something like that.
I LOVED the metaphors you used for this also. The one suggestion I would have would be to take away directly telling us how each day was and instead relying only on the metaphors to do so. For example-
right now you have
"Yesterday was.......
blissful like chimes blowing in the fall breeze."

and I think it would add more to the poem if you wrote it as-
"Yesterday was.......
like chimes blowing in the fall breeze."
that way you're showing the reader as opposed to telling them, so we have to think more about it and it involves a reader more in the poem, they sort of become one with it.

a great poem!

[SpokenWord]

No matter what life brings I try to see the better side of things even if they are the worst of times. I believe the past is gone and will never be again, tomorrow hasn't come and thus doesn't exist and all that matters, all that is really real is right here in this moment of time. Your poem rings so very true.

[Brad]

an awakening that happens when so much thought is on that rollercoaster of life introspection

[Coyote Poetry]

Life is a test. We can't allow the disappointment to blind us. We never know what may be on the next path. I like the set-up of the poem. Made your ending strong and true. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Marie Harrison]

I like it. Sounds like reality to me. I always learn something, whether the days are good or bad. There always seems to be an overall lesson to be learned.

[Moflo]

I think it came out pretty nice, I like the message of it and I found it pretty inspiring. I like how you showed the ups and downs of life.

[Magdelena]

I think it has loads of honesty inside. Feelings rare and being so, brings forth a sense of "I am inside' type of feeling. I so can relate to this.. It holds true for many of us I think. Your imagery on this one was outstanding..

Amazing...

Mags xx

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the see saw of days through life well described~