Where?

Falling out of love!

Where was I when you stopped loving me?

 

In our bed hugging your pillow to my chest?

Delirious with sorrowful pain,

feeling the hole in my heart grow bigger?

Forgotton, lost, like days gone by?

 

Laying in a tub of enticing bubbles,

drowning my emptiness in lavender scent?

Blood turning cold from the lack of your touch?

Silence drums in my ears.

 

By your side, lust for her sweating from your  brow?

Your euphoric behavior tells me you're thinking of her?

Flood gates open the salty tears to my eyes.

 

Wearing your velvet shirt,

smelling your lies?

Prayers unheard being said.

Destoyed by your desires

I burn with hot anger.

 

Inside of me, but making love to her.

Your sinful arms wrapped around me,

bundling me in false love.

 

Your extrinsic ways reveal

that you fell out of love with me.

My life melts away from me little by little,

leaving me disconnected.

 

Where was I when you stopped loving me?

Together?

                            Apart?

             With her?

                   With me?

               Here?

                      There?

 

But what I really want to know is:

Where were you when you fell in love with her?

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Written for the creatie poetry group. We had to use these words: extrinsic enticing, euphoric, delirious, velvet, sinful. Tell me what you think! I hope I got the meaning of each word right.

Reviews

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

This is SUPERB...!!!!!!

SUPER LIKE..!!!

[SheWhoWillNotBeNamed]

Oh this one took a toll on me. Nice write! Heavy, but nice!

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is honest and direct. I like the question and the flow of this poem. Your description of each situation made the poem stronger. I like the last question. Thank you for sharing this outstanding pom.
Coyote

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Beautiful joB~ although I think silence should be silent.

[Shawn Pfister]

I like the imagery. I can really feel the bitterness and feelings of anger and dispair.

"Your euphoric behavior tells me your thinking of her." Second your should be you're.

Most of these sentences end in periods, but they're implied questions and should end in question marks. The subject is trying to figure out where "she" was when he fell out of love.

[Art]

nice work...the sting of this pain surely has been felt by many...

[?]

oh so intense and powerful. Great job.
The ending was excellent

[Tina Kline]

A very powerful and tragic poem. You did a wonderful job using the words required. A very painful and well written poem.

[Ladysue]

I thought you did a great job with the words. I like this and the ending really good...

[Brad]

no how much this hurts...felt it again...great wordsmithing