im in you

When I fall in you

I thought you will be

The fire for my camp

In that rainy day

I realized that I was mistaken

I thought you will change

for me for my love

But I was also mistaken

I thought that you are different

But you wasn’t

You was that lion

 That is ate me

And left the bones

When I cried

I didn’t find you there

When it rains on me

I didn’t feel you are warming me

When im alone

I didn’t find you there for me

When im lost

You didn’t help me

 When I was falling

You didn’t catch me up

When you knew

 Im crazy about you

You left and gone

And didn’t come

To ask or know

what really hurts?

You didn’t remember

                                                                        im one of those

who fell once

and never will be

another time

cause i gave you this meal

and its done

so am i

          

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

man! you are so unique and talented .. this use (misuse) of tense and grammar (not sure if it is intentional but ) is captivating .. i feel every line .. and your ending is equally unique .. i say ..just push away from the table .. :)
God bless
E.

[stars are far]

thanks ..

[darkgurl]

Wow I can feel this write. There is alot of emotion gathered into this. Very well expressed.