what i deserve !!

i don't deserve this

i deserve someone better than you
i deserve someone who understands me
someone who could see the inside me
someone that would know the real me

i deserve someone who will never make me cry
not like you
that is making me on the way to die

i deserve someone that will fly me to Pluto
and not like you the only fly that take me is to my tomb
 
i deserve someone that will appreciate my writings
someone that loves everything about me
not like you
trying to delete me from this world

i deserve someone that is ready to give me his heart
not like you only taking mine and move away

i deserve someone that loves me
as i am
and needs my love to survive

Reviews

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

pinful and emotive...

[EMF]

A very emotive and pinful piece to read. Very professional in approach and structure, but strong in hitting emotional chords. Perfect.

But, for the pedantic amongst us, this one would benefit from capitalising the 'I'. On a subconscious level it will make the reader focus more on you. The author. Just hits a bit more of an emotinal twang.

[Fontane Wong]

Obviously, it's a true writing. The emotions and feelings are so true and real, and you have written out what you desire(and what really everyone desire) out clearly. So intensive and simply cold. There's always something that make us are not enough or perfect in others' eyes, so we often desire for things we didn't get or want. Everyone needs love though, no matter how cold and chilly the heart is, warmth and bliss is somewhere in the heart, so deep that no one would discover. A superb writing, love it so much.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Superb writing, emotions here are so truthful, and what we all desire you have expressed superbly. Wonderful:)

[Lively]

Very nice, true, lovely.

[Enigma]

Well written. Some people in life tend to take others for granted. They're insensitive and simply cold. We might do everything for them and yet, there's always a flaw to be pointed out, always something that makes us not good enough in their eyes. In my personal opinion, its better to be alone than try to make things work in such a situation.

Nice poem. Loved it! :D