I+you = forever it's a love

You said: “Don’t leave my heart because..”

I said:” Don’t leave me alone because..”

 

You said:”.. It would be empty and..”

I said: “.. I would be afraid and..”

 

You said :” …I will feel lonely trust me that ..”

I said:”… it will be yearning from pain and you are ..”

 

You said :”…I love you voice, I love your..”

I said: ”the sun that shine my line ,the one who..”

 

You said:”…Smell it is like flower in a sunny morning, you are ..”

I said:”…Made me smile , and make me ..”

 

You said:”…the moon that I stare at all night and…”

I said:”…Feel like the world is all mine ..”

 

You said :”…I forget to tell you that ..”

I said:”…Don’t go I want to tell you that…”

I+you said :”I LOVE YOU “

Author's Note

Ok i wrote this on the english period yesterday :P

so what do you think of it ??

Reviews

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

This is sooo amazing I found it best to read the you said then the I said as whole...as a passage ie

I said:
"Don’t leave me alone because I would be afraid and
it will be yearning from pain and you are
the sun that shine my line ,
the one who Made me smile ,
and make me Feel like the world is all mine
Don’t go I want to tell you that
I love you....

both passages are utterly beautiful...

[Andrea Vargas]

Its cute and adorable! Love is so hard to control and to write it down is a memmory to cherish ! (:

[Sleepless]

aaaaw!!! i just piecutred the whole scen this was a really sweet ebautiful poem !!:)

[paradise]

Wow thisd absolutly beautiful and very unique

[~Blue Fantasy~]

Very nice....I enjoyed this and the way you wrote it! Nice work!!

[Desmund Tiny]

so sweet.... I like it... you show both side's feelings.... great penned

[Thea]

Yay, so creative, huh...Really sweet! I like this so much... :)))

[- - -]

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

[Senseless whatever]

Good choice for the form you used here. Love the combination cross conversation. Two poems, one on top the other, like the two side by side holding hands.

[Dove]

This is really interesting and romantic. There wasn't one line out of place everything fit perfectly together. Beautiful write.