Two Spirits Watching The Ocean Of Turmoil

A poetic analogy about life and it's hardship and the watchful eye of two different spirits who strive to accomplish their own goal with mankind in the middle of the contest.

Life is like being a passenger on a luxury ocean liner
That is sails across a Sea of Turmoil.
Passengers feel safe by putting their faith in the sturdy construction of the ship’s steel hull.
Their senses are enveloped by the beautiful gold, silver, brass, wood that accents the interior of the ship.

There is a Specter who‘s heart is dark as black satin and as cold as an iceberg.
Who is rarely seen by the human eye, for he stealthily move under the cloak of night,
And dwells in the shadows by day.
His nature is deception and violence
His power are death and decay
He Rome’s and back and forth on the sea of Turmoil, stalking luxury ocean liners.
Sometimes He will play cat and mouse games by annoying the passenger slowly picking their ship apart with rust and rot.
Other times he will crush a ship with a title wave,
Or blow a ship apart by an on board fire.
The Specter evilly snicker when the survivor have to abandon ship and try to tread water.

The passenger try to cling on to their strange Theologies and Philosophies to keep themselves afloat.
The Specter stirs the sea of Turmoil with his crooked finger to create great tempest to try and drowned his victims to transport them to the lake of Fire that lay beneath the Sea of Turmoil.

The passenger’s desperate out cries for help reach the ears of The King of Light.
He send His Son by His swiftest ship
To rescue anyone who will receive their help.
The Son will transport His passengers to the shores of His father’s kingdom
Where they will be made heirs with the Son.
They will dwell in the eternal golden city of The King of Light.

The King of light will forever remove the Specter of Darkness and His domain the Sea of Turmoil.

Written by Stephen J. Vattimo
July 12, 2016

Reviews

[Urja Gokani]

Very interesting. I really like the first stanza; the way in which the speaker notices every detail of the mundane act of painting nails reveals his deep affection for the subject of the poem. The symbolism of painting the ring finger first is very telling. I have to admit, you lost me for a second on the part with the ocean - it just seems to escalate so quickly. But I suppose that's the point; it demonstrates the feeling of being overwhelmed by the possibilities and implications of this relationship. (At least, that's how I interpreted it - forgive me if I'm wrong!) And I do like the way you transitioned from the nail-painting to the "ocean" through the subject crying over a "ripple" in her nail. Although it's quite abrupt, that makes sense, and it's a cool idea. Finally, the last two lines are interesting. The "beach" seems to be a metaphor for this intensely emotional (and potentially semi-hysterical) side of the subject that the speaker has never witnessed before. It's a great way to wrap up the poem. Overall, very nicely done!