Gypsies With Wings

Gypsies With Wings

A Poem by Susanna F
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November 19, 2014

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We are gypsies with wings of steel feathers
We bring with us bad luck and good weather
We dance in the rain and find pain in the sun
But we’ll never find home no matter how far we run.

An odd flock are we, strung on a wire
Purified by betrayal and fire
Too long have we lived, and yet never at all
So we’ll sing weeping tunes ‘til our time comes to fall.

We are misfits in a world of grotesques
Each face a character arabesque
Will we ever find roost in a place so demented?
Perhaps once the battlers have relented.

Each moment is stolen and each day a trial -- 
Though we carry the gifts of hope, goals, and denial;
Not much farther to fly, and the view may be clearer,
But will rich, sated moments ever be any dearer?

© 2015 Susanna F


Author's Note

Susanna F
Edited Jan. 29, 2015 for wording/flow.

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WE are indeed the gypsy the nomad and misfits ever seeking and writing til the next world comes for us sadistically offsetting years of pain for stolen moments of ultimate bliss like the addict in denial.
This struck a deep cord within me Susanna and I hope it never stops reverberating.


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Susanna F

5 Years Ago

Wow. You got it. Maybe even more than I did while writing it. Thanks for taking the time to comment .. read more



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i love the first 4 verses and I was captivated by every word

Posted 4 Years Ago


I absolutely love the picture you painted!
One that touches soul.
This is inspiring and well written.
You have a beautiful talent.



Posted 4 Years Ago


Great imagery! I love the metaphor! Coming from where I am, though, I think that Life for us is not being set adrift. We are where we are because of some conscious decision made in the past as to where we would go. It is all about choices we make and the personal responsibility we have to take for the consequences of these. Things don't happen to us at random although it seems as if they do.

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Susanna F

4 Years Ago

Thanks for sharing your thoughts! I agree that our choices lead us...though sometimes to places we d.. read more
Very nice, good writing, wonderful description, Thank you Susanna for these poem. keeping writing in this way...

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Well done. You've captured the traits, mannerisms and character of the gypsy well. I could never survive their lifestyle.

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WE are indeed the gypsy the nomad and misfits ever seeking and writing til the next world comes for us sadistically offsetting years of pain for stolen moments of ultimate bliss like the addict in denial.
This struck a deep cord within me Susanna and I hope it never stops reverberating.


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Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Susanna F

5 Years Ago

Wow. You got it. Maybe even more than I did while writing it. Thanks for taking the time to comment .. read more
i love the first three verses and I was captivated by every word. Thought it trailed off a bit at the end. Good structure and vocabulary!! Very descriptive and deep writing well done!

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Susanna F

5 Years Ago

I think you are right about the ending. Thanks for taking the time to review!
I like the opening line and the fact that the narrator says 'WE are gypsies' helps to set the imagery of unison for all the actions you later describe. I also like the structure and the way you spaced your stanzas. awesome write!

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Susanna F
Susanna F

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