B-day gift,"POETRY".

B-day gift,"POETRY".

A Poem by sushobhan

"When the luminosity of comet glitters,
a perspective, akin to your soul gets born."
"A phenom like you,with gusto and zeal,
is ablazed to smite my strife and get them veiled.

"The colleagues proclaim you as managing crystal,
 and for me, your statue is to be placed on heart's pedestal."
"It's the band that's acknowledged by nature,
 for which you stand as a reverred creature."
 
"You are a big dent to my obstacles,
which may whip me with their tentacles."
"Don't beckon these words as my gratitude.
 as your greatness makes it your attitude."

"This trivial sonnet deserves no spot,
 but still,certify this as a gift from your tiny tot.

© 2013 sushobhan


Author's Note

sushobhan
DON'T MIND OVER THE WORD REVERRED {Incorrect ENGLISH}. It means respect. PLEASE DO RATE IT IF YOU LIKED IT. Today is the B-day of my father.

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Sunny sonnet it is. Definitely rhyming some very difficult and amazing words. You mentioned Birthday - but no cake ? :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Some terrific metaphoric lines within this honourable homily !

Very touching and creative !

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love this lovely Sonnet--first one I've read for a Birthday---that makes it that much more special my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


sushobhan

11 Years Ago

It's too scrumptious when a legend like you reviews anyone
poetdoug

11 Years Ago

You are so kind my talented friend
Great piece. I can deeply connect with this imagery. On an Esoteric level, you could consider a more literal truth to this symbolism. What you describe could serve as a metaphor for the energetic threads that develop between people and objects. As a shamanic healer I have worked with such karmically binding energy "cords" for myself and others.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Awe inspiring, a lovely honor in his name, hope your father appreciated this sweet tribute for his birthday.

Posted 11 Years Ago


sushobhan

11 Years Ago

Thank ya' kind woman. Your words were like the "Greek crown of leaves".
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

How lovely of you to say, it was my pleasure, well deserved.
A wonderful birthday gift of words. Splendid.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

Wow. That is an honor...You are welcome...:)
sushobhan

11 Years Ago

Thanks for laying your golden layer of review on the poem. You're an awesome personality.
Sami Khalil

11 Years Ago

You too...Thank you kindly...:)
It is a wonderful poem. I enjoyed it a lot. You have a gift for poetic construction. Not a skill set that is abundant in every poet.

Posted 11 Years Ago


sushobhan

11 Years Ago

I was infiltrated with merriment to get that. What an honor to be reviewed by a guy like you.
You did awesomely! I really, really liked the myriad of ample words. It provides reason to invoke thought and is cute as well. ^^

Posted 11 Years Ago


sushobhan

11 Years Ago

Thanks for your painstaking visit. This was an inspirational review.
Layni LaCroix

11 Years Ago

You just keep doing your thing, okay?
That's brilliant. Your command of language is amazing, such lovely words! And to write something like that for your Dad is lovely. Really enjoyed it, thank you :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


sushobhan

11 Years Ago

Hats off to you for your review. Such poignant remarks are like a new poem to me.
Mercia74

11 Years Ago

keep at it!

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