Polyandry

multiple relationships all at the same time

Polyandry

 

     There she was waving at him, beckoning him to come nearer.  He was entranced.  She was the most beautiful thing he had ever seen.  Plump and on the heavy side - but all the better for him.  He never was one for skinny girls.  This one wasn’t some one night stand.  This one was for something more permanent.  Something forever.

 

     He wondered where she came from.  Girls like her were hard to find.  This one rare beauty.  He waited all his life for her.  He wanted to whisk her off and take her away from all of this " this darkness that enveloped their lives.  She, with the shining beacon, that would make his existence more meaningful.  He had to make his move now before someone else did.

 

     He made his way toward her wondering what he would say.  What would he do?  He was just this ordinary guy with nothing much except to offer his total commitment to her.  He would do it only for her.

 

     He spotted another going towards her.  What the…?  That creep was nuzzling her!  She seemed to like it.  Enraged, he sped towards her, not masking his desire to get rid of the intruder and to have her for his own.

 

     Two more of them came over, aggressively touching her.  She was bothered now and tried to wriggle away.  The three pursued her.  He felt her panic and sped on to her rescue.  He would do it only for her.

 

     She faltered a few meters, exhausted from the chase.  He sped on to meet her.  He wanted to take her away from those jerks.  He knew what they had in mind and he was never going to let them use her.  He had to get her away and then, perhaps, she would see who he was " someone who would be there by her side forever.  He would do it only for her.

 

     One of them caught up to her.  She desperately tried to get away but one by one, they did.  They latched on to her.  In futility, she gave a final lurch but they latched on.  He could only see her hurting and he knew he had to remove those perverts from her body.

 

     He tried but those guys would only fling him off and latch themselves tighter to her.  He could sense her pain.  He knew it was agonizing.  There was nothing for him to do now.  She could not be his and his alone.   But he could never be without her.

 

     In his defeat, he made his final move going back towards her, unmindful of the others, he had to do what they were doing, too.

 

     He went under her side, made a loud cry and sank his teeth into her.

 

 

     When the relatively puny male anglerfish is born, he has only one mission in mind - to seek a mate before his brief life ends.  Equipped with a keen olfactory sense, he makes his way to find the rare female, attaches himself to her with his teeth and atrophies so that only his testes is left, his sperm ready to discharge the moment she releases her eggs. 

 

     A female can have up to six males clasping to her as they slowly degenerate.   

Author's Note

-- just some drivel as I took a break from work....

Reviews

[Daffy]

Hi. I enjoyed the brief story here, and I wouldn't say it is drivel! However, you could sit down and re-write it. Each part of the chase could be improved I think. Here is one line that does not read very well: 'One of them caught up to her. She desperately tried to get away but one by one, they did'. In this sentence did 'they' get away, or did 'they' catch up?
So in my view, the idea of the story is very good, and particularly the way you leave the 'truth' of the story until the end. However, it needs to flow more in its description as you create that picture.

[Rachelle]

Thank you, ma'm! I did have difficulty describing the chase. It was a struggle from writing in my usual cold and objective manner or deciding to make things ambiguous to make the reader wonder what really happened. I am so used to writing short and succinct because to me, that is what technical writing is - you don't show who you are. You are just there to present facts and observations - so the shorter and more direct to the point it is, in jargon that people who are not in the field may comprehend - the better. Alas! Description and imagination is not something I come with but that is why I am here. 'Appreciate your feedback and I will try to break free from being the cold and clinical Sweetbind to someone who grew all because of people like you! In my native tongue, Salamat po! (Thank you, ma'm!)

[Daffy]

Hi, I think you are very talented. Don't worry about the initial smaller points of 'faltering', but focus on the impact of your work. I find your this story very far reaching. Daffy

[Glen Yumang Manese]

A different type of feel in here...as I read this work...its a survival trait in the aspect of things here...and the explanation in the end puts a reference in the scheme of your work...again you do put science in there to give this an edge from the norm...as for editing this to make it more...I'm sure could go back and give this a polish...

[New Theory]

Interesting fact, made for a good story when you humanized the characters, was a little tense, awesome piece, would love to read your stories

[Rachelle]

Thanks! I don't post them all up here. Publisher's rules.

[New Theory]

Ohh its ok, whatever is here I can read that :)

[Rachelle]

I think I have another fish story here somewhere.

[New Theory]

I will check that out :)

[Reyvrex Questor Reyes]

Good concept. You could have written as well about the queen bee. She has thousands of males, and maybe, not one of the offsprings happened to know its father.

[Rachelle]

Not an apiarist but thanks for the concept….

[Ronnie]

I think this is really good. I think I wouldn't have put the fact in at the bottom of the piece. I maybe would have dropped clues in that would suggest its the Anglerfish.

[Rachelle]

Thank you, purposely ambiguous, though....

[Ronnie]

That was next comment to take the factual bit out and leave it ambiguous.

[Rachelle]

But I love facts and skittish about the ambiguous! :( The scientist in me speaks the loudest. Just thought that ambiguity would serve well in the first part, though, just to confuse and amuse.

[Ronnie]

I love ambiguous. In my stories I tie things up and give a conclusion, but I will if I can add a little bit to make the reader think that the story could carry on. But you will find your own style in time. Michael Crichton would write interesting stories fun and entertaining but he would slip in facts but he found thebbalance. It may take you time to find your way. But never stop searching.

[Rachelle]

Okay, thanks for all the help!

[Katerina C]

Aww. This is so sad. Very well done though!

[Rachelle]

Thank you!

[David Scott]

Cool!
I new it was about the wild animal kingdom pretty soon.
Neat play on the readers expectations. Hang on to this for your graduate work. The kids will love it. Talk about devoted obsessions. Ha.

[Rachelle]

Now, I'm getting to be predictable...:(

[David Scott]

Not at all.
I think most readers will be expecting something sexy...
A very strong and unique story.

[Clayton Bardwell]

Talk about molder gurry! Not drivel at all. It was interesting and fun. A real head scratcher.

[Rachelle]

What in the world is molder gurry? I am unfamiliar with the term.
Lots of weird things going on in the animal kingdom, though. You should check out my observations on mollusks...

[Clayton Bardwell]

I should have said moldering gurry. Basically, it's rotting fish offal.

You taught me something with this story. I love that.

[Rachelle]

Filipino term: balunbalunang nabubulok

[Clayton Bardwell]

That sounds better:)

[Marie]

This sounded really terrible until I read the part about the anglerfish...

[Rachelle]

Hee! Hee! Something terrible for Halloween, I guess. It is not a tradition in my country but we are rapidly getting exposed to it.

[Angi]

First I was thinking vampires. But that was not quite right. Then, I was picturing a college campus and a gang of drunken frat boys attacking her while the loner that wanted her watched. I was amazed by the little note at the end, Sweetbind. I have never heard of the anglerfish and the way they mate. How horrifying! Very interesting stuff here. Angi~

[Rachelle]

It is really bizarre but given their environment down in the dark ocean floor, it is difficult for the boys to find a lady so when they do, they parasitically attach themselves to her and slowly atrophy. Only the gonads are left to release sperm once a signal from the female triggers it. Adaptation and survival. Just some stuff we came upon in the field.

[Clayton Bardwell]

Who's the we and what field are you referring to? Sounds like a work environment.

[Clayton Bardwell]

I work for the Dept of Fish and Wildlife and am surrounded by biologists!

[Rachelle]

Yes, yes! Struggling underpaid and obscure biologist venting on Writers Cafe...

[Rachelle]

US? What do you do?

[Clayton Bardwell]

The Department buys up old cattle ranches that are suitable wildlife habitat and manage them for fish and wildlife. The biologist determine what is to be done and I do it:) I am one step below a biologist. I am a fish and wildlife technician. It is similar to a ranch hand, except we ranch for wildlife. I also help with the spring and fall round ups of deer and bighorn sheep for biological screening and general health checks.

[Rachelle]

So good to have your country do something like that! Our country is ridden with corruption and no one really cares except for the logging issues. Unfortunately, the lumber companies bribe local government officials so our forests are quickly being exploited. Sadness!

[Clayton Bardwell]

No government is pure of heart. Some more than others. I'm always saddened to hear about the destruction of the worlds natural resources. We are all connected. Madness.

[Clayton Bardwell]

Struggling and under paid for sure. I wouldn't do anything else.

[Rachelle]

If the world purely consisted of capitalists, depletion and extinction would surely have happened a millenium ago. Thank God for people like you! Keep up the work for Gaia!

[Clayton Bardwell]

And you, dear Persephone!