so no one can see my pain

crying in the rain

so no one can see my pain

i'm thinking about your smile

the tears will stay for a while

i can't bear to think of you anymore

for each time it cuts me more and more

that's why i'm crying in the rain

so no one can see my pain

Author's Note

i am constantly depressed lately so i turn it into writing

Reviews

[Cool Handless Luke]

A little refinery? I think they meant to say a little refining - lol. But i totally disagree. the simplicity of it is what is so endearing and how the ending becomes full circle with the beginning. it's a subject many will identify with it so there is no need to complicate it with distracting language. a nice picture doesn't truly look better if you put it in an intricate frame does it? straight from the heart wording is a direct line to expressing your pain - you hit this one right on the mark - don't change a line. well written and well felt.

[unlawfulpermanence]

a very interesting and significant poem, but the language needs a little refinery, so it's not so trite.