Growing into Us

Innocent start
lusty words
no more
than afternoon fantasies

Comfort rose quickly
with trust
tender words
confidences shared

baring our souls
over time
exposing truths

exposing all
to kindred strangers

sharing more
sharing all
knowing compassion

knowing security
each in our own
relationship
a thousand miles apart

then unexpectedly
she fractured your life
and opened my door

with great courage
I crossed the threshold
to what I hoped would be
us

security fled
leaving a wake of emotions
we had to learn to navigate
gently, tenderly, together

you
trying to discover
life beyond her love

me
trying to help you
find your smile

reaching deep inside
for a confidence not mine
and finding strength
in my independence

and the irrepressible smile
of my own greatest joy

we travel this road
together
growing into us

into our own love
unique
and stable
in its own way

I know she can still break me

but she can't break our bond
because I own my own place now
in your heart

whatever waters
we have yet to learn
to navigate
we'll do it

gently, tenderly, together

that is security
uniquely different
from any I have known

Reviews

[Piper Sullivan]

This is a very emotional piece that, for some reason, I find myself relating to. I like the pacing of this poem and my favorite lines were, "reaching deep inside / for a confidence not mine." For some reason that really hit home with me. I agree with Jane (Hi Jane! small world!) that the beginning doesn't seem to fit. I think it might be the use of "lusty" that kind of throws me off. Anyway, good job! Keep it up.

[Denny]

I like the read have no prob w/ "lusty words". They can be part of a friendship. What I have trouble w/ is the rhythm as the poem goes on. "I know she can still break me.....in your heart" stops me and I have to start over w/ the flow. It may be the layout you have or what I see as too much prose. I enjoy the work as a whole for there is a smooth love poem in here.

[Jane]

Very nice poem, very good description of what it is like to love someone.
The only thing that concerns me is the beginning-- an innocent start full of lusty words? The ideas don't seem to fit together.
Very nice work, though!