Under the Walnut Tree`

Revolutions born from courage brings change in the society and for once, the bad becomes good in future. Those who changed their path out of weakness repents in past.

Under the walnut tree, she was dressed as a bride.

“Go away for good”, she said and cried.

Feet waited for no long and desperately he ran

away from her and sealed their fate.

Time rolled by and their different lives

crossed one day and there they stood.

Their weary eyes met and poured

Summer it was but river overflowed.

Price have hiked for all they touch,

Narrow lanes have developed some space.

Separated by color and race,

Had they dared to shatter those bars,

Flower of love would not have withered.

Revolutions born of courage now speaks

narrowing the gaps and everyone the same.

Her feet of guilt walked towards his shame,

But flower of his Garden now belonged somewhere,

Frozen for once he gathered himself

“Go away for good”, his last words came.

She checked herself and disappeared into dark,

Mist cleared too late, under the Walnut tree.

Author's Note

I feel that the pioneers who bring end to discriminations live the real life, rest all is fake and only born illegitimate out of fear from society.

Reviews

[wordman]

i think it`s the society that you were born in,during the sixties a racial marriage was un heard of,guys coming from viet nam bringing wives had a hard road
,college kids hated soldiers,soldiers hated them..and i believe there is still a lot of discrimination today but people are quiet about it

[tanmay7551]

You are right discriminations are diminishing but in different parts of the world they still exist in disguise.

[barleygirl]

I understand only about half of what you're saying here. It's enuf understanding to appreciate your overall message. This is an interesting & important message, but it's hard to read & decipher the way you put words & phrases together. Example: "Feet waited for no long" (this doesn't make sense, but I think you mean "Feet didn't wait for long") . . . I get the drift of your story-with-a-lesson, but I'm not sure if you are trying to write with a loose poetic form or if you are stating things a little twisted accidentally.

[tanmay7551]

Novice attempt, false air of heroism in twists
Interpret it in all ways, will be true.

Saw a kid jumping freestyle, making faces, laughing, fake cry... An attempt to impress elders of the family! - Source of inspiration. :)

[barleygirl]

WOW! That's a big leap! *wink! wink!* (Getting from your inspiration to this message which seems quite different). Maybe I didn't tell you well enuf that your word crafting is excellent here.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I liked reading this.. The story within this poetry is described nicely.. Good work!

[tanmay7551]

Thanks Yumna, I am glad that you liked it!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome! It was a pleasure ☺

[MOON]

Wait for the day when the content of the heart is all that matters and the human race matures .

[tanmay7551]

Thanks for you insight. Agreed, human race need to mature and it is happening.. It is only about the time, few things do not seem right at present but in future it will be a different case.

[Miss Sharon]

Your writing is deep and always interesting. Bravo! ~Sharon

[tanmay7551]

Thank you Sharon for your uplifting words and I am glad that you liked it.

[Parvathy Nandan]

Beautiful work bud, good choice of words and phrase composition...and a tad resemblance to Shakespeare's poem Under the Greenwood Tree.
Keep up, cheers :)

[tanmay7551]

Thanks for the review, Parvathy. Those are inspiring words! Never heard of Under the Greenwood Tree, but now I will have a look.

[Parvathy Nandan]

Do read, ul find similarities in thought...

[Ted Kniffen]

Unfortunately, as with racism, the caste system is alive and well. The Civil Rights movement of the 60's brought the beginning of change, but we've a long ways to go on both sides to make it effective. As Martin Luther King said,
'I have a dream that my four little children will one day live in a nation where they will not be judged by the color of their skin, but by the content of their character.'

Good write, T.

[tanmay7551]

Its all a labyrinth of schemes. Caste, color, religion etc. are made and supported by higher authorities to rule the masses.

Thanks Ted for your insight on the subject.

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As one who has many colours weaved through my veins this poem speaks volumes. Fantastic write. Starz

[tanmay7551]

Thanks Starz, your words are inspiring!

[Valentine]

I do not understand all of the reasons for racism, we all are God's children, yet living in the U.S.A. we still see racism every day on the news and in our history. Loved your write. Valentine

[tanmay7551]

Thanks Valentine and while I agree with you, I see it as a smart treachery of people at higher position in the society who want to rule certain masses of people by creating difference among them.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, society for so long feared interracial relationships...back when i was in high school and college,, the beginning of the civil rights movements...lots of ground to cover...

this poem brings to mind a song by Janis Ian.."society's child"

' i can't see you anymore, baby"

maybe fighting harder might have been the answer...but those relationships were met with angry eyes and fraught with peril.

this poem speaks volumes...especially the line "she checked herself and disappeared into dark"
love the double meaning there.

j.

[tanmay7551]

Thanks a lot J, for the song! It's beautiful.

I can't see you any more, baby,
Can't see you anymore.
Walk me down to school, baby,
Everybody's acting deaf and dumb.
Until they turn and say, "Why don't you stick to your own kind."
My teachers all laugh, the smirking stares,
Cutting deep down in our affairs.