I died in a eclipse

remember i suck at spelling!!! was in a dark place, tell me what you think

Frozen mind, numb body,

eyes locked, fingers crosed, bowing in the deadly sun.

sins burned, death takes hold,

 

knees hit the now unsoft ground.

chains cole your body. The goshtly pale hand crest your face.

Red-purple smoke takes the clouds.

 

 Rain falls, crying for your soul.

 Earth cracks unpon your fright,

 

clouds open to realce the heavens.

Moons moving, a black father falls.

 

Heaven and hell scream,

closing out the day. Eyes open now,

 

god and lucafure are standind at your sides.

God reachs for your hand. Soft as velvit

 

 the gates of heaven open,

 pain burns all over, death is easy.

 

Floting in a black hole,

a pool of white light at the end.

 

The heavens grove takes a hold.

 

I dead in a eclipse.

Reviews

[Frank F. Atanacio]

I enjoyed this piece tremendously--well written and very well done Kudos!

[Linear]

Well it's dark, does heaven really have a grave? and a black feather falls, , thats a great line