someday

i remember the day
you caught the wind
inside your arms and
kissed its cheek once
before letting it go.
you told me that if
i really loved him i
would let him go, but
i never was able to
ask you how i was
supposed to let you
go if i never had you
in the first place.
you were never one
to be hypocritical
like me, but you
were always one to
call me out on it.
i never wanted to be
something that my
mother once was, but
sometimes we cannot
become what our poor
hearts aspire us to.
you always picked
the girls that were
fine; the ones who
when they said they
were okay, they really
meant it.  you never
liked the broken ones.
you never wanted one
that you had to save.
you never wanted me.
and somehow, that was
okay because in a way,
that was me letting
go of you, just like
you never had me 'cause
you never took me.

Reviews

[KeeD]

Beautiful piece, I like the presentation and the story it tells. I like the imagery where you compared the relationship to an armful of wind, you can only try and hold on to it for so long but it has to be set free, it's to complicated to hold on too, sometimes It's like it was never there, sometimes it feels like it will always be around. Pretty cool write, Very creative, a lot of respect to this piece which has both strength and emotion flowing very well.

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thanks so much! :)

[eglantine]

Nice consistent stream of consciousness, flow of thought. Just wish there were a bit more concrete images/details.

[Hey Hey Renee]

I'll keep that in mind. Thanks!

[Richard Man]

It seems that this guy is a coward. It's all very well being able to leap onto the back of a horse or leave it tethered to a post or stabled. This weak way. But what of a wild one? The knack is to develop trust ... the language ... to break or tame... male domination bah... trusting and loving is the new bravery.
This is a good poem full of reason and strength.

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you so much!

[InsanityWriter]

So sad and beautiful. Excellent piece. :)

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you!

[Khloevhr]

Wow! I very much like this. The structure, flow, and story brings you in. It is powerful, a person would continue reading till the end. It has many elements of a good story. Oh, and this particular poem seems to be further expand on my short poem 4get it (coincidentally) ... I love it and can relate :)

[Hey Hey Renee]

I'll definitely check your poem out! Thank you!

[Carolann Dowsett]

Wow love it, how can you let someone go you never had? Full of sadness and truth I can very much relate to 'who would want the broken ones, the ones you have to save.' Sounds like my kind of love story. Beautifully written.

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you so much! :)

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Trippy man.

[Sheila Kline]

Very intriguing story line with a terrific ending! This is a love lost poem with a different perspective which is very interesting!

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you :)

[Felicity's Eve]

I love the last 4 lines. Very powerful :)

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you :)

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[Dominic Witkop]

A true piece. Very lovely especially the start "The day you caught the wind..." fantastic place imagery.
Oh "and you never liked the broken ones", that line stood with me. Well done!

[Hey Hey Renee]

Oh, thank you so much! :)

[Aelia Darkshadow]

:)