i need to be free

i need to be free

so i went out

in a nice white dress

took off my shoes

and listened to the sounds of water

that sound is so calming

i needed to be free

so i went to where the water runs

i took of my shoes

and stared out into the sky

the water sounds calm me

i need to be free

so i steped in to the water that was cold

so cold i could feel it inside me

the water sounds calm me

i needed to be free

so i went out

took my shoes off

steped in the water

and then i laid

which seemed like hours

as i slowly drifted away into the world

the water sounds calm me

Reviews

[sivan]

beautiful poem. the repetition of "the water sounds calm me" is very effective and a nice way to end the poem

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the taking off of the shoes. First step in being free of life problems. I like the desire of the poem. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Priscilla Sayers]

As water does soothe. A nice way to release! Well done!

[Minnie]

This is a great poem! Continue being great! :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Great flow to it. Keep it up;)