Section 3: Means of Communicating Ideas

sticks or nails, emergency, red ballyhoo flag:

Thoughts rushing at charade language, no going back.

Paper falls pre-symbiosis satire

Straw-in-the-wind, dyed-in-the-wool desire

 

Dog eyes pound out falsehood -

Christmas pinnacle glowing stones for eyes.

Not on the head - complete disaster -

Chop butcher up the drums of façade.

 

bare feet and bare hands

               yawn they can hear it. Laugh.

               Nomenclature revised, then

               Stamped out and remade.

 

Love may fix the hole it made.

 

The fable of my untruthed life

  - tattooed illusionist despite -

tinsel mysticism of horrored joy

truth reveals itself in corner 'o' light

 

With neon tennis ball of dog.

The illusionist performs one last trick

                                then burns his knives

 

naked, inflated, belated;

and the knife ashes purify

As I drink the storm in my tea-cup.

Reviews

[Shahrier]

i simply love your diction and sometimes in truth, its beyond me. and because of you diction, this poems sounds very good, but i gotta admit, the poem itself sounds very confusing. im guessing that because communicating is very difficult. i dont know, but most of the time, i dont like poems that are too confusing, but i actually liked this one very much :)

[imagination-1234]

thank you for reviewing!
Well, basically the poem is confusing or is seen as confusing because that's how my mind was. It's all my feelings mixing and maybe dangerously in terms of being logical. This was really a means of expression, normally I try to be quite clear.

[Shahrier]

In that case, would it be ok to ask what was going on? Like, if the confusion is/isn't about the struggles of communicating, then I'm curious to why the poem became as it is. This question might be person, so if you don't wanna answer, its perfectly ok.

[imagination-1234]

Of course. Basically what I went through (sorry that sounds cheesy) was a thunderstorm. It was chaotic, sad, upsetting - but, in the aftermath it clears the air ('stamped out and remade'), and it was made in retrospect, so it's about reinventing yourself for a new day, new start...but of course you remember the thunderstorm, and the confusion etc.

[Shahrier]

Hmm, that's a pretty cool way of thinking.

[imagination-1234]

thank you. I'm not sure if I would use the word 'cool', but it's quite a clever analogy I have to say hehe ;)

[Shahrier]

You know what I meant. My diction isn't as good as yours :)

[imagination-1234]

haha, it's only cos I have a thesaurus!