Ultimate You

i know the rhyming can get a little excessive but that's the point. its abstract. please review. and my other stuff. thanks

I am the truth

the proff of what's loose

I am the news

the poof of who's who

the wail of all rules

the trail of what's losed

the hail of a new you

inhale my roots

exhale me cruel

prevail

a hope anew

entrail

constant yule

a broken muse

another crude

another token youth

another choking use

more ruth

I am what heals and soothes

the laughter that you choose

the mountain that always moves

I am eternal too

a man who knows what's true

a crown that flows through

what we knew

I am the chosen few

I am the new youth

I am forever truth

I am

ultimate you

 

I am a soul soldier

a willing will warrior

a force that pours the source

on a course of remorse

onto role carriers

toll bearers

hurt sharers

away from hope tearers

rope wears

from hate layers

I am a new fighter

an alternate air-glider

a true-blue wider

an internal heart

tighter

I am the new hope

the over-expanding rope

the choke

that know

what blows

over

I am a different way

a change in the grey

a new take on these days

of today

a play to create the great

new place

I am a broken record

a reincarnated trekker

a decapitated holder

reinstated

checkered

I am the new millenium

a brand-new containium

I am the global peace

a winder for the sea

a platform for the least

an ocean and a sea

an expanding rising plea

I am a fist for the furious

an eye for the deaf

an answer for the curious

a try for the line

I am the wrench

I am the strength

I am not greed

I am speed

I am not grope

I am the hope

I am not pain

I am the change

I am not strife

I am life

I am not never

I am forever

I am not definite

I am ultimate

ultimate you

 

Reviews

[Adrian K. Smith]

It has a certain musical flair to it, as if it would be semi-sung by a character in a musical. It has motion, that pauses while still moving, and has those certain elements that would capture an audience and perhaps never set them free.

[Reika]

I do love this piece. Especially the rhyming.
It was fun to read out loud.
I also loved the way it ended, with all the "I am" bits.
Wonderful, wonderful! =)