Fire town

Fire town

A Poem by Weeping Willow
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Fire town

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I look through the window made of glass,

And see nothing but fire rain down,

This town hides its crime behind an unseen mask,

 Even this fire won’t be seen by the other town,

 

Everyone is poor,

Everyone is dying,

Beggars beg for more,

As children start crying,

 

The fire doesn’t stop,

No matter the time of day,

Even if the sun drops,

Nothing can stop our pain,

 

I look back to my sister and brother,

We cannot hide forever,

From our mother,

But hiding from her is not clever,

 

She is probably the worse,

In all this town,

Since she sends everyone home in a hearse,

Even when the fire rains down,

 

I stare at them and smile,

I just have to wait for the slave traders to come,

That will send them away at least a mile,

As long as they no longer have to see mum,

 

As long as they no longer have to see this town,

They will live a better life as a slave,

Even if there are covered in the colour brown,

I know they can behave,

 

As long as they don’t die,

Like my other sister,

I don’t want to say good bye,

 

But I have no choice,

It’s survival of the fittest,

I decided to raise my voice,

I will take mothers place as the biggest,

 

So I no long have to see my sisters and brothers die,

So I no longer am forced to kill them,

So I no longer have to say good bye,

To the ones I love.

© 2014 Weeping Willow


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Weeping Willow
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This is such a moving poem! And your grammar isn't even that bad honestly, I didn't really see anything majorly wrong. I loved your rhyming scheme - everything flowed so nicely.
"This town hides its crime behind an unseen mask"
I really like this line ^^

Posted 4 Years Ago


Ohhhh! What a touching poem!

"Everyone is poor,
Everyone is dying,
Beggars beg for more,
As children start crying,"

That ... was there in my heart. :D

And also,
in this line :

"She is probably the worse,
In all this town,
Since she sends everyone home in a hearse,
Even when the fire rains down,"

Worse should be "Worst"?
Unless it's intentional.

I love the ending line.
The Poem is lovely!

Posted 5 Years Ago



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Weeping Willow
Weeping Willow

Dream land, Shelbyville, Australia



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