Give It to Me

Give It to Me

A Poem by Sarah Marie

I give an inch,

You give an excuse--


I give a breath,

You give the noose--


I give my last,

You give your worst--


I give the tinder,

You give the torch--


I give my pain,

You give the blade--


I give my weakness,

You give your hate--


I give the best that I can,

But you don’t even give a damn.

© 2018 Sarah Marie


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Add an "ever" to the second last line, and it would further give the poem power (and help the musicality, too). But the poem on the whole is fantastic. Good flow, strong narrative/message, and an absolute killer ending! Well done! Much enjoyed!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Sarah Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks for the review and idea! Yeah, I can definitely hear that flow. Glad you enjoyed!

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Sarah Marie
Sarah Marie

my own world...come visit me!, SC



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Aspiring starving artist: Bachelor's degree in English, minor in professional writing, concentration in writing, unofficial concentration in British literature...2017 more..

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