Beautiful Sunset

Bittersweet farewells. Find the joy in every goodbye.

Beautiful Sunset

 

 

 

A beautiful sunset

What a beautiful sunset

 

Ignore all your sorrows

hold back your tears

your soul may despair

but it's a beautiful sunset

 

do not fear the ends

the pain of farewell

try to take in

this beautiful sunset

 

our life is like earth

going through its seasons

moving on its own terms

to its beautiful sunset

 

although it may seem so

it never happens too soon

things always will end

at their beautiful sunset

 

what a glorious day

so hard to let go

but just try to enjoy

this beautiful sunset

 

sunrise

Author's Note

So this is my second shot at poetry and I think it is, somehow, worse than my first. Regression!
Anyways here it is! have at it! advice is welcome :)

Reviews

[Kevin Horsley]

I did prefer your first poem, but this is not bad.
Repetition of a phrase adds strength to a poem and this is no exception.
Some small spelling errors - last stanza - glorious for example.

Again, flows fairly well. With a little more time the kinks can be ironed out.

[Skateprincess]

I think you do fairly well with poetry, in my opinion there isn't really any real wrong or right way to write a poem :) (unless it is a specific type of poem such as a Haiku etc)

[Lourisa]

I like it a lot and especially like how you describe our lives
"going through its seasons
moving on its own terms
to its beautiful sunset"
Well done!

[Tate Morgan]

Good hing to write on connecting the flow of life to the seasons of the earth they both developed together and so are related by each other.we are the result of the ebbs and flow of the seasons and the tides the winds and weather the sun and moon very interesting and my favorite they are concise and say what you want to say in a small space i do that as well you dont want to lose the audience in the depth and length

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is a nice piece of work. Keep it up. You'll get better as you keep writing.

[Meher Saigol]

This is a simple yet profound poem. It gives me a sense of time and how everything has to come to an end. However, if you think about it, there is still sunrise to follow - a new beginning. I adore the sunset, might I add. It really is beautiful in very profound ways :)

[lostboy]

this is comeing from the right place..who said parting is such sweet sorrow.. sometimes the sunset is the most beautiful part of the day.

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I'm also just starting to write poetry and I think you will definitely find that you improve a lot as you keep writing. The ending seemed a little abrupt, but I liked it. The repetition in each stanza gave this a lyrical feel.

[Aristede Craig Jr]

"Thats what im talking about see more be more then write until you cant write more but when you truly become a poet it feels endlees like the poems you may write are one big poem that last forever" Edet Sira Rambling Poet

[Samuel Dickens]

In my opinion, this is excellent poetry--the kind that is easily understood and carries a thoughtful message. Here you've shown the truth of life; how amidst sorrow, beauty yet exists.

[quinfinn]

i think it's great! keep writing, for this is not regression, it is the process of registration...the mind thinks it, the body and soul feel it, and the pen shares it.
good job!