Stomach pain

I am writhering from the stomach pain.
Was it the smokes, the alcohol
or the stress again.
I am slowly losing my mind.
hey bunny rabbit,
where are you going tonight?
On an adventure you say?
Wow, let me join you
I could even pay.
Bunny rabbit with a watch.
Relieve me of the pain
I cannot match.
I have never felt this sad before.
You are a gentleman
of that i am sure.
Bunny rabbit take me down the hole.
To vampires and fairies.
And that funny looking mole.
He has a magnificient tophat
and a golden cane in his hand.
To be fair. I am jealous
And depressed in the sand.
Where do I go?
please show me the way?
Cause I cannot phantom
how my concious would sway.
Writing from this deathbed of mine.
You would walk on
and leave me behind.
So I beg of you the single last dance.
My awareness is shrinking.
and I can only move my mouth and hands.
Bunny rabbit, why is your pelt so dark.
I am getting scared of your red eyes.
And your inhumane bark.
You are not a rabbit nor are you a hare.
You are a wolf,
and I am left bare.
So just go for my throat you harbinger of death.
Since this stomach pain is killing me.
And my life is at an end.

Reviews

[KWP]

wow - this is great
kinda like an even more twisted Alice in Wonderland
within the lines a story unfolds
and keeps you right there in your place reading more
i love the originality
i love the context and volume with your words that seem to silently scream

well done you xx

[Tobias Rasmussen]

Thank you so very much. It has been such a long time since I wrote anything and was beginning to doubt my worth.

[KWP]

Well don't ... A writers process should be with himself first and why should there be any doubt when you are dealing with the one person you know the best in the whole world.

I really enjoy your poems ... Keep it up ... Find the flow ... I come and go from
Poetry but always after the return I find myself in a place of peace x x

[Demii]

This is really impressive, I loved how you used characters from Alice and wonderland and turned into an emotionally sad piece, it had great flow, so deep with a lot of meaning, I really loved it. :)

[Tobias Rasmussen]

You are the first, who noticed the reference :D yay :D

[Demii]

I loved it ! It was such a great idea, Very creative :)

[Ines]

Great piece, deep and very well written. :)

[Tobias Rasmussen]

Thank you very much :) i really appreciate your review :)

[Ines]

You're welcome, and I would like it if you could review one of my stories.