Only a Sliver of Light

An image of anxiety

Broken heart

Damaged soul

Eyes with tears so full

Quiet mouth

Silent pain

As steadily falls the rain

Dull eyes

Dark faith

With shadows following like a wraith

Shaking hands

Unsteady trust

As the chains slowly rust

Mistaken feet

Faulty hope

With burdens under which no one could cope

Gaunt face

Sliver of light

Maybe one day an end will come to the night

Author's Note

An ending of hope.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A dark poem with little light.
"With burdens under which no one could cope
Gaunt face
Sliver of light
Maybe one day an end will come to the night"
Sometime a ounce of hope can save us. I like how you let to the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Riley Justine]

Thanks so much for all your constructive criticism!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Archia]

I thought this had a lot of impact, the short sentences worked well with the longer ones, it added an emphasis to them. I really liked the last line as well, it was the right note to end on.

[Riley Justine]

Thank you so much! I worked really hard on this poem so I'm glad you liked it!

[Zac]

This is a very great and emotional poem,
you are a good poet.
Keep it up.

[realmwriter]

There is no need for criticism here. This is a stellar write and very well penned I must say. Hard to believe you are only 15 from the evidence available in this write, I would have guessed much older. At least in your late twenties. I love the line "With shadows following like a wraith" very much the style of Poe. Well done indeed.

[Riley Justine]

Thank you so much!

[realmwriter]

You are very welcome.